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Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? w20m
Technology grow very smoothly in 21st century as compare to ancient time. In my opinion, using internet for shopping has huge advantages with few distadvantages too. In this technology era people used to do everything on internet. For examplery, people used ordered there daily requirement through internet such as books, gloceries, stuff etc. The trend of buying many things on online gone crazy day by day, because it saves time as well as money. Now a days buying needed things by online become person habitat. Many online company are growing very high like Amazon, Ali baba etc because of good customer service. People used to buy books, stuff, gloceries and other many item through this site. If you are too busy in your life you can order food items online also which make people life easy. If you are going long distance travel you can book you ticket through internet. So that people are more crazy for online shopping. You can buy anything without going outside everything will delivered onto your door. That is why online shoping become more and more famous as people prone to do shoping online. Because of this craziness of people many online site are opening newly. some online site contain maximum things that people needs and it makes people more comfortable to buy different item from same site. Howerver, online shoping has distadvantages also if you buy something may be that is of bad quality or good quality you can't get to know until you order and see that. Secondly you will not able to choose things like in physical shopping. Sometime your ordered does'nt match with the item which was deivered, in this case you have to return things but the delivery charge was not return, so it was quit difficult to buy everything by online. If you go by physical it will plus advantage to you because you have chance to get physical exercise too. To sum up the given statement we can conclude that buying things online has much advantages with some disadvantages like we know everythings that has advantages has some disadvantages too.
Technology grow
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very
smoothly
in 21st century as compare to ancient time. In my opinion, using internet for shopping has huge
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advantages
with few
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distadvantages
too. In this technology era
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people
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used
to do
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everything
on internet. For
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examplery
,
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people
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used
ordered there daily requirement through internet such as books,
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gloceries
, stuff etc.

The trend of buying
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many
things on
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online
gone crazy day by day,
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because
it saves time
as well
as money.
Did you mean "nowadays"?
Now a days
buying needed things by
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online
become person habitat.
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Many
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online
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company
are growing
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very
high like Amazon, Ali baba etc
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because
of
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good
customer service.
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People
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used
to
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buy
books, stuff,
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gloceries
and other
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many
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item
through this site.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you are too busy in your life you can order food
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items
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online
also
which
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make
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people
life easy.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you are going long distance travel you can book you ticket through internet.
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So
that
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people
are more crazy for
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online
shopping. You can
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buy
anything without going outside
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everything
will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "deliver"
delivered
onto your door.
That is
why
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online
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shoping
become more and more
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famous
as
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people
prone to do
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shoping
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online
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of this craziness of
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people
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many
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online
site are opening
newly
.
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some
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online
site contain maximum things that
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people
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needs
and it
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makes
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people
more comfortable to
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buy
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different
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item
from same site.

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Howerver
,
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online
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shoping
has
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distadvantages
also
if you
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buy
something may be
that is
of
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bad
quality or
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good
quality you can't
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get
to know until you order and
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see
that.
Secondly
you will not able to choose things like in physical shopping. Sometime your ordered
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does'nt
match with the
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item
which was
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deivered
,
in this case
you
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have to
return things
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but
the delivery charge was not return,
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so
it
was quit
difficult to
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buy
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everything
by
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online
. If you go by physical it will plus
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advantage
to you
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because
you have chance to
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get
physical exercise too.

To sum up the
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given
statement we can conclude that buying things
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online
has
Use "many" with countable nouns.
much
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advantages
with
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some
disadvantages like we know
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everythings
that has
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advantages
has
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some
disadvantages too.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
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