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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? pQyy
These days there are a lot of websites selling stuff on the internet. Actually they sell everything starting by cars and houses, and ending by gums, games, etc. So, some people think that is good and save you time, money and effort, while others believe that cost us lost plenty of jobs. I will discuss both sides in this essay and will draw my personal conclusion. In one hand, a number of people say that shopping online is bad for the economy because we will lost jobs. Such as truck driver that brought productsto the little shop, and little shop administartor. For example, if a bussiness man let their employees leave and close the little shop, instead of that he open a website and sell products from it. It will gain more because he decresad the cost of work and on this sitution. It will increase the number of unemployees and that bad for the either economy or our social safety. So thats why some think that it is bad for us. On the other hand, others say it is save our effort and time. And now we can stay at home and buy what we need. To illustarte, a man who had just return from a long work day and he discover that he need something for the supper. It will much harder to go out and buy his needing than buy it throught the internet. Hence the belief that it save our time and effort. In addition, it will save your money too. Just think about for a while the comparing process on the internet much easier than it on our actual world. For an instance, if want to compare the prices of big shopping centre in your city, you should go to each one. On the costrancy, on the internet, you can do it by just click on the mouse, in your living room on your comfort sofa. This proves clearly that it is better for us. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views. I believe that is good for us and we should keep use it and try to make it more safe and easy.
These days there are
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a lot of
websites selling stuff on the internet. Actually they sell everything starting by cars and
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houses
, and ending by gums, games, etc.
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So
,
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some
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people
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think
that is
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good
and
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save
you time, money and effort, while others believe that cost us lost
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plenty
of jobs. I will discuss both sides in this essay and will draw my personal conclusion.

In one hand, a number of
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people
say that shopping online is
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bad
for the economy
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because
we will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "lose"
lost
jobs. Such as truck driver that brought
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productsto
the
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little
shop, and
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little
shop
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administartor
.
For example
, if a
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bussiness
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man
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let
their employees
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leave
and close the
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little
shop,
instead
of that he open a website and sell products from it. It will gain more
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because
he
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decresad
the cost of work and on this
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sitution
. It will increase the number of
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unemployees
and that
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bad
for the either economy or our social safety.
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So
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thats
why
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some
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think
that it is
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bad
for us.

On the other hand
, others say it is
The word "save" is a verb. Did you mean the adjective "safe"?
save
our effort and time. And
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now
we can stay at home and
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buy
what we need. To
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illustarte
, a
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man
who had
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just
return from a long work
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
day and
he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "discovers", "discovered".
discover
that he need something for the supper. It will much harder to go out and
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buy
his needing than
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buy
it
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throught
the internet.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
the belief that it
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save
our time and effort.

In addition
, it will
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save
your money too.
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Just
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think
about for a while the comparing process on the internet much easier than it on our actual world. For an instance, if want to compare the prices of
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big
shopping
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centre
in your city, you should go to each one. On the
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costrancy
, on the internet, you can do it by
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just
click on the mouse, in your living room on your comfort sofa. This proves
clearly
that it is better for us.

In conclusion
, after a careful analysis of both point views. I believe
that is
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good
for
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we should
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keep
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use
it and try to
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make
it more safe and easy.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
362 words
6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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