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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? dBkE
Online shopping has become the norm in recent years. Online shopping often offers a greater range of products than offline shops and with seemingly all the hassle removed. One need only press a button to place their order and there on just wair for their delivery. However, this convenience does come with some baggage. A big one is, the customer has no way to verify their purchase until they have the goods delivered to them, which at the least takes several days. It is true that some of these online services offer refunds and allow returns; but it is also true that shopping online exposes one to online scams and frauds. Scalpers are also an online only threat, they buy all the stock of whatever products is popular and then sell tham at astronomically high prices. One saving grace might be that these shopping sites hold a great many more sales and offer huge discounts more often than their offline counterparts. In contrast, offline shopping offers several advantages, one can check the goods as they recieve them, the goods are recieved as soon as one pays for them, one need not worry about having their financial information stolen either. However the down side is that one needs to leave the comfort of their house for all this and their options are limited to whatever their local store offers, which is rather miniscule when compared to the options offered online. In conclusion, I'd say offline shopping is a bit better than online shopping, yes the options may be limited and the price a little high but it is better because of several reasons. Firstly one gets to know their local seller and may develop a bond with them over time, the chances of being scammed are also exponentially low, no scalpers either. It is well known that huge brands like amazon, ali-express, flipkart, etcetera dominate the online shopping industry leaving little room form smaller brands to flourish. So offline shopping also offers a way for local producers to survive. Hence, in my opinion, not only is offline shopping better for the buyers, it is also advantagious to the sellers.
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a greater range of products than offline shops and with
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press a button to place their order and there on
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for their delivery.

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baggage. A
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purchase
until they have the
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goods
delivered to them, which at the least takes several days. It is true that
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of these
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services
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refunds and
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returns;
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it is
also
true that
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exposes one to
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scams and frauds. Scalpers are
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all the stock of whatever products is popular and then sell
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high prices. One saving grace might be that these
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sites hold a great
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more sales and
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offer
huge discounts more
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than their offline counterparts.

In contrast
, offline
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shopping
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several advantages, one can
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the
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as one pays for them, one need not worry about having their financial information stolen either.
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is that one needs to
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the comfort of their
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for all this and their options
are limited
to whatever their local store
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, which is
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miniscule
when compared to the options offered online.

In conclusion
, I'd say offline
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is a bit better than
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, yes the options may
be limited
and the price a
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high
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to know their local seller and may develop a bond with them over time, the chances of
being scammed
are
also
exponentially
low, no scalpers either. It is well known that huge brands like
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amazon
,
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ali-express
,
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flipkart
, etcetera dominate the
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online
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industry leaving
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little
room form smaller brands to flourish.
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So
offline
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shopping
also
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offers
a way for local producers to survive.
Hence
, in my opinion, not
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only
is offline
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better for the buyers, it is
also
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advantagious
to the sellers.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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