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Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? GXOL
With the rise of technology, it is now common that goods can be bought on the Internet, with a wide variety of things ranging from books to airplane tickets which you can buy straight off the net. Personally, I think that online shopping has great advantages that can shadow the disadvantages. On the one hand, thanks to the existence of online shopping, people do not need to worry about being unable to buy things that are not sold at their local stores and supermarkets. Further more, they are no longer have to go to stores, some of which can be far away just to buy goods because they can have things they bought online shipped to their home. For example, Vietnamese people can not buy Google's Pixel phones because there are hardly any official Google store in this country, but they still can buy Pixel phones through Google online store and get it shipped right at their doorstep. On the other hand, online shopping does come with its own risks, for instance you may recieve a product that you did not order or a product that got misplaced, in worst cases you may recieved nothing at all. Moreover you can be scammed into buying fake stuffs or low quality stuffs with the price as high as the authentic or high quality ones. But most of this can be avoided if you buy things from authorized or trusted online resellers. In conclusion, online shopping give people many benefits such as having a wide variety of things to buy and getting ordered items shipped to the customer's address. But it also contains some risks to the customer like them getting fake, low quality products with an expensive price or recieving products that they did not ordered. But in my opinion the advantages of online shopping most likely will outdo its disadvantages.
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now
common that
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goods
can be
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bought
on the Internet, with a wide variety of things ranging from books to airplane tickets which you can
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buy
straight off the net.
Personally
, I
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think
that
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online
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shopping
has great advantages that can shadow the disadvantages.

On the one hand, thanks to the existence of
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online
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shopping
,
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people
do not need to worry about being unable to
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buy
things that are not sold at their local
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stores
and supermarkets.
Further
more, they are no longer
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have to
go to
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stores
,
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some
of which can be far away
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just
to
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buy
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goods
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because
they can have things they
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bought
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online
shipped to their home.
For example
, Vietnamese
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people
can not
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buy
Google's Pixel phones
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because
there are hardly any official Google
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store
in this country,
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but
they
still
can
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buy
Pixel phones through Google
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online
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store
and
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get
it shipped right at their doorstep.

On the other hand
,
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online
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shopping
does
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come
with its
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own
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risks
,
for instance
you may
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recieve
a
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product
that you did not order or a
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product
that
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got
misplaced, in
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worst
cases you may
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recieved
nothing at all.
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Moreover
you can
be scammed
into buying fake stuffs or low quality stuffs with the price as high as the authentic or high quality ones.
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But
most of this can
be avoided
if you
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buy
things from authorized or trusted
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online
resellers.

In conclusion
,
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online
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shopping
give
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people
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many
benefits such as having a wide variety of things to
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buy
and getting ordered items shipped to the customer's address.
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But
it
also
contains
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some
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risks
to the customer like them getting fake, low quality
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products
with an expensive price or
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recieving
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products
that they did not
The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: "order"
ordered
.
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But
in my opinion the advantages of
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online
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shopping
most likely will outdo its disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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309 words
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