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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? 20eb
Nowadays, shopping on internet is the most prevalent characteristic that one can witness in the digitalization period. I'm more inclined towards the idea of buying things on internet and i believe it is the most efficient way for the quality shopping. I will discuss two advantages to support my discussion. First one is saving money and time. Generally people often spend their quality time and money for shopping the clothes and for booking the tickets. Instead online shopping has been saving the customers time and effort where shopping on fingerprints give timeless experience along with super cool deals. For instance If an individual decides to shop a trouser, he has to spend time and money to reach out the outlet to get the product, whereas if he chooses online shopping effortlessly he can explore variety of designs and can decide the product without killing the time. Second one is hassle free experience. According to the customer behavior booking tickets offline is one of the hectic things in their experience. Rather than going offline, online shopping is the reliable and fastest way of booking tickets on fingertips. It ensures speed and hassle free experience to the customers. Perhaps timeliness is also one of the key factors and the added advantage during this process. One can also come across and avail different offers and discounts while they are booking for tickets on online. Unlike many policies in out door shopping, online shopping introduces many refund policies and also delivering products at their doorsteps. Thus advantages of online shopping in every which outweighs the disadvantages and gives us the most enthralling experience to the customers
Nowadays,
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on internet is the most prevalent characteristic that one can witness in the digitalization period.

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of buying things on internet and
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i
believe it is the most efficient way for the quality
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shopping
. I will discuss two advantages to support my discussion.

First
one is saving money and
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time
.
Generally
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people
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often
spend their quality
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time
and money for
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shopping
the clothes and for booking the
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tickets
.
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Instead
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online
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shopping
has been saving the
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customers
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time
and effort where
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shopping
on fingerprints give timeless
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experience
along with super cool deals.
For instance
If an individual decides to shop a trouser, he
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has to
spend
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time
and money to reach out the outlet to
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get
the product, whereas if he chooses
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online
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shopping
effortlessly
he can explore variety of designs and can decide the product without killing the time.

Second one is hassle free
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experience
. According to the
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customer
behavior booking
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tickets
offline is one of the hectic things in their
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experience
.
Rather
than going offline,
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online
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shopping
is the reliable and fastest way of booking
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tickets
on fingertips. It ensures speed and hassle free
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experience
to the
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customers
. Perhaps timeliness is
also
one of the key factors and the
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advantage during this process. One can
also
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across and avail
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different
offers and discounts while they are booking for
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tickets
on
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online
. Unlike
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many
policies in out door
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,
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online
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shopping
introduces
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many
refund policies and
also
delivering products at their doorsteps.
Thus
advantages of
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online
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shopping
in every which outweighs the disadvantages and gives us the most enthralling
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experience
to the
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customers
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
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