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Burning Mirror

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The reading provides three reasons to show that burning mirror is a myth and the Greeks of the Syracuse could not build such a weapon. The speaker, however, said that the reasons are unconvincing and refute each reason. First, the passage says ancient Greeks were not advanced enough to build such a large complex mirror. But the speaker states that they don't have to build such a large mirror and several smaller mirrors can mimic the same purpose. The same parabolic curvature is also achievable with some help from a mathematician. Second, the author states that it takes a long time to set wood on fire at that distance even without considering the ships are on the move. However, the speaker reminds that the ships construction material is not just wood. She explains that there was a sticky material called pitch used to waterproofing the ships and this material catch fire in a matter of seconds. Third, the author claims that burning mirror was not an improvement over their framing arrow at the time, hence they had no reason to build such a weapon. The speaker objects this reason by saying that the Roman navy was aware of the flaming arrow and would notice the weapon as soon as the Greeks wanted to use them while burning mirror could set their ships on fire without attracting their attention. So, the Romans wouldn't notice until their ship is actually on fire.
The reading provides three
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reasons
to
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show
that burning mirror is a myth and the Greeks of the Syracuse could not
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build
such a weapon. The speaker,
however
, said that the
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reasons
are unconvincing and refute each reason.

First
, the passage says ancient Greeks were not advanced
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enough
to
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build
such a large complex mirror.
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But
the speaker states that they don't
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have to
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build
such a large mirror and several smaller mirrors can mimic the same purpose. The same parabolic curvature is
also
achievable with
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some
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help
from a mathematician.

Second, the author states that it takes a long time to set wood on
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fire
at that distance even without considering the
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ships
are on the
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move
.
However
, the speaker reminds that the
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ships
construction material is not
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just
wood. She
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explains
that there was a sticky
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material called
pitch
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used
to waterproofing the
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ships
and this material catch
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fire
in a matter of seconds.

Third, the author claims that burning mirror was not an improvement over their framing arrow at the time,
hence
they had no
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reason
to
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build
such a weapon. The speaker objects this
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reason
by saying that the Roman navy was aware of the flaming arrow and would notice the weapon as
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soon
as the Greeks wanted to
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use
them while burning mirror could set their
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ships
on
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fire
without attracting their attention.
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So
, the Romans wouldn't notice until their
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ship
is actually on
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fire
.
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IELTS essay Burning Mirror

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
240 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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