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Bullying increased in all schools

Bullying increased in all schools 7JxQ5
One of the main problems in schools where students are getting bullied. This essay will discuss two main causes such as bulliers are pretending themselves as stronger and being vulnerable in nature and this essay will suggest two main solutions like giving punishments and educating students to behave discipline. The cause of this problem are so basic that is bullying can be a key where bulliers can show their strength and by pretending themselves as stronger so they are in the position of hurting students who are weaker than them. secondly most of the bulliers have high political background or even wealthier background. bullying may lead to mental stress, anxiety and increasing of child crimes in the society. for instance, in India most of the bulliers are from political background and nearly 50 % of them from wealthiest background so normal people cannot complaint against them. Moving on to the solutions, solutions are not easy but if school institutions introduced some strict rules for students then it can be possible to solve. the main thing for school authorities is to regulate strict punishment and rules such as montering students or bags to check whether they have any dangerous thing or not and punishments like suspension, not allowing to write exams if they caught up for bullying which will significantly stop Villiers from bullying. lastly having good approach and friendly training is important with students and educating disciplines will really help. In conclusion many students bullied at their schools this can be because of political sources behind them according to solutions there should be peer teaching, strict punishments to all students without inequity.
One of the
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are getting bullied. This essay will discuss two
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bulliers
are pretending themselves as stronger and being vulnerable in nature and this essay will suggest two
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solutions
like giving
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punishments
and educating
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students
to behave discipline.

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bullying
can be a key where
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bulliers
can
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show
their strength and by pretending themselves as stronger
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they are in the position of hurting
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students
who are weaker than
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them
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secondly
most of the
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bulliers
have high political
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background
or even wealthier
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background
.
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bullying
may lead to mental
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stress
, anxiety and increasing of child crimes in the society.
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for
instance, in India most of the
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bulliers
are from political
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background
and
nearly
50 % of them from
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wealthiest
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background
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normal
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cannot complaint against them.

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,
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are not easy
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if
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institutions introduced
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strict
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for
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students
then it can be possible to solve.
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the
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thing for
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authorities is to regulate strict
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punishment
and
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rules
such as
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montering
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students
or bags to
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check
whether they have any
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dangerous
thing or not and
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punishments
like suspension, not allowing
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exams if they caught up for
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bullying
which will
significantly
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Villiers
from
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bullying
.
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lastly
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approach and friendly training is
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students
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In conclusion
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bullied at their
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this can be
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because
of political sources behind them according to
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solutions
there should be peer teaching, strict
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punishments
to all
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students
without inequity.
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IELTS essay Bullying increased in all schools

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
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