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bringing mobile phone to schools leads to more negative than positive effects.

bringing mobile phone to schools leads to more negative than positive effects. DYALW
Cell phones or mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. schools nowadays had been discussed bringing mobile phones to school. it is very difficult when we think of life without a mobile phone. if we think again, a mobile phone has many pros and cons that we might think it is either suitable or not suitable for students to bring it to school. yes, it is true that we all can agree if students bring their mobile phones to school has good benefit such as the best gadget to make us communicate. students can communicate with anyone at any time they want. at this point, it is also can lead towards negative things. some students use cell phones while the teacher is teaching. Students can take this chance to use it in the wrong way.
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IELTS essay bringing mobile phone to schools leads to more negative than positive effects.

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