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Both the reading and the lecture are about the development of an international fund to be used to protect the world's forests from the increased pressure they facing.

Both the reading and the lecture are about the development of an international fund to be used to protect the world's forests from the increased pressure they facing. PVn1B
Both the reading and the lecture are about the development of an international fund to be used to protect the world's forests from the increased pressure they facing. The author of the reading provides us with three examples of how this fund can be used. On the other side, the lecturer challenges these uses by providing us with the reasons why these uses are not the best. First of all, the author suggests that the fund should be directed to protect the forest's agriculture. As it is mentioned this way will help government, landowners, and farmers in facing the deforesting pressure come from oil companies, logging industry, and property developers. This argument challenged by the lecturer. He says that forest agriculture is a destructive pressure itself. He further illustrates that farmers are under pressure to increase land productivity and to overcome this pressure they use fertilizers and insecticides. These products cause water pollution and they also run off the nutrition of the soil. As a result, directing fund in the agriculture field is not a good use of them. second, the author contends that the use of this fund in stipending the local dwellers of the forest will be an ideal use. The article notes that this money will help the villagers to resist the conversion of their land to any destructive thing rather than a regular forest. Also will provide them with better education, health services, and nutritional aids. This will make them less tempted to leave the land or to destroy it. However, the lecturer rebates that by asserting that the money will not be directed in the right way, because the money will go to the landlords or the government, not the actual residents. As a result, there is no benefit will come on the dwellers to encourage them to protect the land from any inner or outer invasion. So this is not a good use of the money. Finally, it is stated in the article that this fund can be used in establishing protected forest areas. The author establishes that these protected forests will maintain biodiversity as the people will not use them for their personal purposes like food or shelter. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that even though with protected forests, human will maintain planting the commercially used plants, which will destroy the biodiversity.
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to protect the world's
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from the increased
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pressure
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they facing
. The
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of the reading provides us with three examples of how this
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used
. On the other side, the
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challenges these
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by providing us with the reasons why these
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are not the best.

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, the
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author
suggests that the
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fund
should
be directed
to protect the forest's agriculture. As it
is mentioned
this way will
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help
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government
, landowners, and farmers in facing the deforesting
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pressure
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come
from oil
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companies
, logging industry, and property developers. This argument challenged by the
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lecturer
. He says that
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forest
agriculture is a destructive
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pressure
itself. He
further
illustrates that farmers are under
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pressure
to increase
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land
productivity and to overcome this
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pressure
they
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use
fertilizers and insecticides. These products cause water
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pollution and
they
also
run off the nutrition of the soil.
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, directing
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fund
in the agriculture field is not a
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good
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use
of them.

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second
, the
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contends that the
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of this
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fund
in
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stipending
the local dwellers of the
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forest
will be an ideal
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use
. The article notes that this money will
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help
the villagers to resist the conversion of their
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land
to any destructive thing
rather
than a regular
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forest
.
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Also
will provide them with better education, health services, and nutritional aids. This will
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make
them less tempted to
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leave
the
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land
or to
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destroy
it.
However
, the
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lecturer
rebates that by asserting that the money will not
be directed
in the right way,
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because
the money will go to the landlords or the
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government
, not the actual residents.
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, there is no benefit will
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come
on the dwellers to encourage them to protect the
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land
from any inner or outer invasion.
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good
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of the money.

Finally
, it
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in the article that this
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can be
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used
in establishing protected
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forest
areas. The
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author
establishes that these protected
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forests
will maintain biodiversity as the
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people
will not
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use
them for their personal purposes like food or shelter. The
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lecturer
,
on the other hand
, posits that
even though
with protected
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forests
, human will maintain planting the
commercially
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used
plants, which will
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destroy
the biodiversity.
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IELTS essay Both the reading and the lecture are about the development of an international fund to be used to protect the world's forests from the increased pressure they facing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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