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because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as a daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for long distances. to what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Global economy made goods that we use in everyday issues manufactured through different countries, notwithstanding globalization which draw our world as small village, that could be find lower costs for products, meanwhile other’s countries losing their competitive advantage in the global marketplace. In my opinion globalization makes our lives better. Global competition make companies find lower cost way to produce their products, which could be create larger variety choices for consumers, high competition between companies drive prices down, for instance APPLE company for smart phones had higher prices over many brands phones, which makes other international companies as HUAWEI phones competes APPLE by lower prices with more developed features, hence help people to developed their live better on less money. Albeit globalization offers many benefits, companies do not embrace globalization risk losing a competitive advantage, which allows other businesses to take over new opportunities in the global marketplace, indeed NOKIA company lose in the stock market, because cannot stay update with competitive features of others smart phones companies. In regard to global economy have huge impacts on the world, that will demand tough competition between international companies to take robust place in the marketplace. In conclusion, many countries around the world remain constantly connected because of globalization and that will improve our lives better, as well as makes our lives more entertainment, however the market place required a risk management strategy from competitors to be lucrative, ultimately the global economy contributes the relationship between societies and countries around the world with overlooking of disadvantages.
Global
economy made
goods
that we
use
in everyday issues manufactured through
different
countries
, notwithstanding globalization which draw our
world
as
small
village, that could be
find
lower costs for products, meanwhile
other’s
countries
losing their competitive advantage in the
global
marketplace. In my opinion globalization
makes
our
lives
better.

Global competition
make
companies
find lower cost way to produce their products, which could be
create
larger variety choices for consumers, high competition between
companies
drive prices down,
for instance
APPLE
company
for smart
phones
had higher prices over
many
brands
phones
, which
makes
other
international
companies
as HUAWEI
phones
competes APPLE by lower prices with more developed features,
hence
help
people
to developed their
live
better on less money.

Albeit globalization offers
many
benefits,
companies
do not embrace globalization
risk
losing a competitive advantage, which
allows
other
businesses to take over new opportunities in the
global
marketplace,
indeed
NOKIA
company
lose in the stock market,
because
cannot stay update with competitive features of others smart
phones
companies
. In regard to
global
economy have huge impacts on the
world
, that will demand tough competition between international
companies
to take robust place in the marketplace.

In conclusion
,
many
countries
around the
world
remain
constantly
connected
because
of globalization and that will
improve
our
lives
better,
as well
as
makes
our
lives
more entertainment,
however
the market place required a
risk
management strategy from competitors to be lucrative,
ultimately
the
global
economy contributes the relationship between societies and
countries
around the
world
with overlooking of disadvantages.
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IELTS essay because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as a daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for long distances.

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