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Banning the unhealthy habit of smoking

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These days, it is a common aim of many governments to pass a bill that prohibits smokers from lighting a cigarette in public areas. They truly believe that banning tobacco smoking tend to lead to less negative health effects among their citizens. I agree with this point of view, but it is important to bear in mind that banning tobacco use does not suit everybody. There are several benefits of banning smoking. For me, the main one is that it is tremendously effective in reducing smoking-related illnesses, such as heart disease and lung cancer. For some, the nicotine withdrawal symptoms and the enjoyable ritual withholds them from quitting to smoke. However, instead of damaging your own health, you can try to use nicotine patches, which means that you feel good and won’t suffer too much from the symptoms, and at the same time, you won’t place an unhealthy burden on others. This generally results in a win-win situation for everyone. Not only that, banning cigarettes might result in smokers saving more money every single month. For instance, a report from New Zealand writes that who someone who smokes a pack a day spends about $953 dollar a month just on cigarettes. So, if all goes well, and the smokes get banned, then a heavy-fag user can save half a monthly salary and spend it on something more productive. This will therefore be more beneficial for not only the chain-smoker, but also for the society itself. Having said that, it is undeniable that banning smoking in public places, such as bars and restaurants, has some pressing negative effects for businesses. For example, if they ban cigarette use, then they might lose important customers. In the weekend, usually bars are chock-a-block with people, but with the smoking ban in place, these pubs might end up completely deserted. Moreover, nowadays, it is very hard to attract customers to vibrant public places, because of the effects of the COVID-19 measures. So, for these business owners, the ban will have some serious adverse effects. To sum up, although there is no doubt that banning cigarettes might not have a positive outcome for everyone, but I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, particularly with regard to reducing the risk of getting smoking-related disease. However, it should be said that pubs and restaurants should get some kind of financial government support, when these anti-smoking actions are being implemented.
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many
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governments
to pass a bill that prohibits smokers from lighting a
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cigarette
in public areas. They
truly
believe that
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tobacco
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smoking
tend to lead to less
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negative
health effects among their citizens. I
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agree
with this point of view,
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but
it is
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important
to bear in mind that
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banning
tobacco
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use
does not suit everybody.

There are several benefits of
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banning
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smoking
. For me, the main one is that it is
tremendously
effective in reducing smoking-related illnesses, such as heart disease and lung cancer. For
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some
, the nicotine withdrawal symptoms and the enjoyable ritual withholds them from quitting to smoke.
However
,
instead
of damaging your
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own
health, you can try to
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use
nicotine patches, which means that you feel
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good
and won’t suffer too much from the symptoms, and at the same time, you won’t
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place
an unhealthy burden on others. This
generally
results in a win-win situation for everyone.

Not
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only
that,
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banning
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cigarettes
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might
result in smokers saving more money every single month.
For instance
, a report from New Zealand writes that who someone who smokes a pack a day spends about $953 dollar a month
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just
on
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cigarettes
.
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, if all goes well, and the smokes
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get
banned, then a heavy-fag user can save half a monthly salary and spend it on something more productive. This will
therefore
be more beneficial for not
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only
the chain-smoker,
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but
also
for the society itself.

Having said that, it is undeniable that
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banning
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smoking
in public
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places
, such as bars and restaurants, has
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some
pressing
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negative
effects for businesses.
For example
, if they ban
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cigarette
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use
, then they
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might
lose
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important
customers. In the weekend,
usually
bars are chock-a-block with
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people
,
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with the
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ban in
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place
, these pubs
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, nowadays, it is
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hard
to attract customers to vibrant public
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places
,
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because
of the effects of the COVID-19 measures.
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, for these business owners, the ban will have
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some
serious adverse effects.

To sum up, although there is no doubt that
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banning
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cigarettes
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might
not have a
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positive
outcome for everyone,
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but
I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks,
particularly
with regard to reducing the
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risk
of getting smoking-related disease.
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, it should
be said
that pubs and restaurants should
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get
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some
kind of financial
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support, when these anti-smoking actions are
being implemented
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IELTS essay Banning the unhealthy habit of smoking

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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