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As more of us are increasingly commute back and forth internationally due to globalization and cheap flights, some might claim that travelling does improve the appreciation for each country. Personally, I absolutely agree with this assertion and those avid travellers indeed understand and show greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home. There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs. Firstly, as travellers go to isolated untouched parts of the world, stay with locals and learn about their culture and way of life, this no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between people from different backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family, for instance, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribal. Secondly, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not sh

As more of us are increasingly commute back and forth internationally due to globalization and cheap flights, some might claim that travelling does improve the appreciation for each country. Personally, I absolutely agree with this assertion and those avid travellers indeed understand and show greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home. There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs. Firstly, as travellers go to isolated untouched parts of the world, stay with locals and learn about their culture and way of life, this no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between people from different backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family, for instance, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribal. Secondly, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not sh bE20B
As more of us are increasingly commute back and forth internationally due to globalization and cheap flights, some might claim that travelling does improve the appreciation for each country. Personally, I absolutely agree with this assertion and those avid travellers indeed understand and show greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home. There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs. Firstly, as travellers go to isolated untouched parts of the world, stay with locals and learn about their culture and way of life, this no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between people from different backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family, for instance, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribal. Secondly, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not share the same values can indeed make a difference to people’s prejudice toward a unique convention, thus encourage us to appreciate it. On the other hand, those people prefer to stay in one place might argue that it is by no means necessary to travel to each place in order to treasure the value of some distant communities. They point to modern technology, such as the computer and the Internet which allow people to look into the outside world without leaving their desks. However, it is no doubt true that not all traditions and tribal lifestyles can be found on the Internet. In fact, there are some tribes living completely separate from the rest of the world and the only solution to know and appreciate those people is to meet them in person and stay with them for a period of time. In conclusion, it appears to me that travel does help us all to show respect to different cultures and I do not believe that modern inventions could fully assist us to achieve this desirable aim.
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increasingly
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internationally
due to globalization and
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cheap
flights,
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some
might claim that travelling does
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improve
the appreciation for each country.
Personally
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absolutely
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agree
with this assertion and those avid
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travellers
indeed
understand and
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show
greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home.

There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs.
Firstly
, as
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travellers
go to isolated untouched parts of the world,
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stay
with locals and learn about their culture and way of life, this no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between
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people
from
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different
backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family,
for instance
, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to
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live
comfortably
in nature thanks to their
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stay
with an Amazon tribal.
Secondly
, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not share the same values can
indeed
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make
a difference to
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people’s
prejudice toward a unique convention,
thus
encourage us to appreciate it.

On the other hand
, those
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people
prefer to
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stay
in one place might argue that it is by no means necessary to travel to each place in order to treasure the value of
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some
distant communities. They point to modern technology, such as the computer and the Internet which
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allow
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people
to look into the outside world without leaving their desks.
However
, it is no doubt true that not all traditions and tribal lifestyles can
be found
on the Internet. In fact, there are
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some
tribes living completely separate from the rest of the world and the
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only
solution to know and appreciate those
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people
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is
to
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meet
them in person and
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stay
with them for a period of time.

In conclusion
, it appears to me that travel does
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help
us all to
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show
respect to
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different
cultures and I do not believe that modern inventions could
fully
assist us to achieve this desirable aim.
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IELTS essay As more of us are increasingly commute back and forth internationally due to globalization and cheap flights, some might claim that travelling does improve the appreciation for each country. Personally, I absolutely agree with this assertion and those avid travellers indeed understand and show greater respect to other cultures than those staying at home. There are several reasons why tourism could lead to better understanding of other traditions and customs. Firstly, as travellers go to isolated untouched parts of the world, stay with locals and learn about their culture and way of life, this no doubt results in strengthening the relationship between people from different backgrounds, which is a vital factor in appreciating distinct lifestyles and traditions. A family, for instance, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribal. Secondly, having opportunities to talk to someone who might not sh

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