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As more and more students enter universities, academic qualifications are becoming devalued. To get ahead in many professions, more than one degree is now required and in future it is likely that people will take a number of degree courses before even sta v.2

As more and more students enter universities, academic qualifications are becoming devalued. To get ahead in many professions, more than one degree is now required and in future it is likely that people will take a number of degree courses before even sta v. 2
It is undeniable that an education is the integral part of pupil’s life. These days, more number of student enrolled in the universities to get a number of degree for better future life. I personally believe that, this is a worrying trend for upcoming generation and for universities. This essay will provide evidence in support of this position. First of all, number of students with equal degree are increased at one place, which will affect universities and upcoming generation. In other words, although there are a limited seats in the universities for particular degree, if educate number raised then it will put a strain on universities. Sometime this will create problems for upcoming students. For instance, in 2005, a London school of management gets difficulty when more number of students enrolled in same degree course. As a result, they had to reduce seats from upcoming batches, to manage more students in one-degree course. Thus, it is clear that universities and upcoming students get affected by present pupils. In addition to this, people who enter into a number of degree courses start their professional life lately because, we all know that most of the degree course take time to complete. This will become obstacle in starting their profession. For example, a recent study by the UK government showed that people with more degrees often gets difficulty for employment because of their age. So, this example clearly shows that people get problem in employment because they spent more time to get number of degree courses. In conclusion, I feel that it is not necessary that person needs more number of degree for better future life. However, universities and future generations affected by those pupils who enrolled continuously in degree courses.
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number
of
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degree
for better future
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life
. I
personally
believe that, this is a worrying trend for
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upcoming
generation and for
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universities
. This essay will provide evidence in support of this position.

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,
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number
of
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students
with equal
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degree
are increased
at one place, which will affect
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universities
and
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upcoming
generation.
In other words
, although there are a limited seats in the
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universities
for particular
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degree
, if educate
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number
raised then it will put a strain on
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universities
. Sometime this will create problems for
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upcoming
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students
.
For instance
, in 2005, a London school of management
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gets
difficulty when more
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number
of
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students
enrolled in same
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degree
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course
.
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, they had to
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reduce
seats from
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batches, to manage more
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in one-degree
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course
.
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affected
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people
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start
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lately
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because
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take time to complete. This will become obstacle in starting their profession.
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government
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showed
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problem in employment
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because
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courses.

In conclusion
, I feel that it is not necessary that person needs more
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of
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degree
for better future
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life
.
However
,
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universities
and future generations
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affected
by those pupils who enrolled
continuously
in
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degree
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courses
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay As more and more students enter universities, academic qualifications are becoming devalued. To get ahead in many professions, more than one degree is now required and in future it is likely that people will take a number of degree courses before even sta v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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