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As fronsporl o,nd occommodolion probrems ore ,ncreosing in mony ifies, some governmenfs ore encouroging businesses lo moie lo rurol reos. Do you ihinklhe odvontoges oulwe igh disodvonloges?

As fronsporl o, nd occommodolion probrems ore, ncreosing in mony ifies, some governmenfs ore encouroging businesses lo moie lo rurol reos. Do you ihinklhe odvontoges oulwe igh disodvonloges? 0nNq9
Nowadays, lots of people want to do business as well as earn extremely high amount of money. As transport, and accommodation problems are increasing in various cities, tiny governments are encouraging business to move to rural areas. The essay discusses the pros as well as cons. To begin with, pros of doing business in rural areas. Firstly, from this, people are not only able to live into the cities on the contrary also they are able to access a number of facilities are able into the cities for example education, well health care, fresh meal, job, and numerous facilities. Apart from this, from rural areas, huge amount of people are able to purchase lots of things which are essential in day-to-day life for example clothes, food, drink, medicines, and numerous other items. Lastly, moving business into rural areas, there will be extremely less pollution occur into the cities due to the fact, huge amount of industries are into the cities, and it pollutes environment. On the flip side, tiny cons. Firstly, a number of people will be not able to purchase product due to lack of transportation. Further more, public from cities, will be not able to order online due to the fact, into rural areas, there is lack of network. Lastly, not all people from rural areas, are able to do job into the companies because of poor knowledge. To put it in a nutshell, advantages of moving business into the rural areas outweigh the disadvantages due to the fact, people from rural areas can enhance their lifestyle if businesses will be move into the rural areas.
Nowadays, lots of
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business
as well
as earn
extremely
high amount of money. As transport, and accommodation problems are increasing in various
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cities
, tiny
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governments
are encouraging
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business
to
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move
to
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rural
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. The essay discusses the pros
as well
as cons.

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begin
with, pros of doing
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business
in
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rural
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areas
.
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, from this,
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people
are not
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only
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able
to
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live
into the
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cities
on the contrary
also
they are
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able
to access a number of facilities are
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able
into the
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cities
for example
education, well health care, fresh meal, job, and numerous facilities. Apart from this, from
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rural
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areas
, huge amount of
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people
are
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able
to
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purchase
lots of things which are essential in day-to-day life
for example
clothes, food, drink, medicines, and numerous other items.
Lastly
, moving
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business
into
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rural
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areas
, there will be
extremely
less pollution occur into the
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cities
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due
to the fact, huge amount of industries are into the
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cities
, and it pollutes environment.

On the flip side, tiny cons.
Firstly
, a number of
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people
will be not
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able
to
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purchase
product
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due
to lack of transportation.
Further
more, public from
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cities
, will be not
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able
to order online
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due
to the fact, into
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rural
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areas
, there is lack of network.
Lastly
, not all
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people
from
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rural
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areas
, are
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able
to do job into the
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companies
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because
of poor knowledge.

To put it in a nutshell, advantages of moving
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business
into the
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rural
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areas
outweigh the disadvantages
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due
to the fact,
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people
from
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rural
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areas
can enhance their lifestyle if
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businesses
will be
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move
into the
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rural
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IELTS essay As fronsporl o, nd occommodolion probrems ore, ncreosing in mony ifies, some governmenfs ore encouroging businesses lo moie lo rurol reos. Do you ihinklhe odvontoges oulwe igh disodvonloges?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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