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As children become adults their society behavior changes in some ways.

As children become adults their society behavior changes in some ways. oRy19

Human life is altered by natural features from time to time especially in social stance is followed by it. However, the ages have different aspects and attitude for society that often entails debate whether it has good or not. This essay will elaborate some factors of this discrepancies and cite my opinion. First, Despite of the physical dissimilarity, psychological differences are manifold between the matured person and children. It can be distinguished by their sophisticated behavior and independence. first and foremost example is that adult tend to withhold their real personal life, whereas the kids are innocent and do not know how to manipulate. However, it is hard to say directly which one is the best tendency because telling lie is sometimes necessary to survive something or someone in the public in particularly. Therefore. of course, being mature is difficult than childhood in the community. On the other hand, in terms of their independence, obviously the society is managed by adults because they have more responsibility and can make independent decisions. Consequently, matured people enact the law which instructs and regulates ever life forms such as child abuse and compulsory education. All of that is devoted for the future generation who will authorize their society whenever they reach the mature age. Even if kids have a lots of eager which is rely on their parents or their near people and environment. They can not able to take entire responsibility for something because they think superficially. For example, If adolescence did something wrongly in the school, teachers prefer to talk their parents. Hence, A community perceives the juniors misleadingly due to their spontaneously actions. To sum up, although their behavior and social tendency is varied by their ages, people need to consider that the moderation is a wise because all ages have positive and negative implications and as long as our children will drive our society, the public should tolerate their poster's drawbacks more flexibly.

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, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyouthmaturitylifeold age
ages
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different
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society
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some
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 discrepancies and cite my opinion.

First
, Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?Despite
Despite of
 the physical dissimilarity, psychological differences are manifold between the matured person and children. It can be distinguished
 by their sophisticated behavior and independence. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterFirst
first
 and foremost example is The verb 'tend' is plural. Did you mean: "that adult tends"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?that adult tends
that adult tend
 to withhold their real personal life, whereas the kids are innocent and do not know how to manipulate. However
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hard
 to say directly
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because
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sometimes
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. Therefore
. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterOf
of
 course, being mature is Use "(difficult)" to make a comparison with this adjective.(difficult)
difficult
 than childhood in the community.

On the other hand
, in terms of their independence, obviously
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
is managed
 by adults This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they have more responsibility and can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 independent decisions. Consequently
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people
 enact the law which instructs and regulates ever life forms such as child abuse and compulsory education. All of that is devoted
 for the future generation who will authorize their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
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age
. Even if kids have Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a lot" or simply "lots"?a lotlots
a lots
 of eager which is Consider using a past participle here: "relied".relied
rely
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 and environment. They can not able to take entire responsibility for something This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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think
superficially
. For example
, If adolescence did something wrongly
 in the school, teachers prefer to talk their parents. Hence
, A community perceives the juniors misleadingly
 due to their spontaneously
 actions.

To sum up, although their behavior and social tendency is varied
 by their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyouthmaturitylifeold age
ages
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 need to consider that the moderation is a wise This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 all You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyouthmaturitylifeold age
ages
 have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 implications and as long as our children will drive our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
, the public should tolerate their poster's drawbacks more flexibly
. 