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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of travelling there is an growing demand for more flights What problems does this have on the environment What measures could be taken to solve the problem v.1

As a result of tourism and the increasing number of travelling there is an growing demand for more flights What problems does this have on the environment What measures could be taken to solve the problem v. 1
Offenders do stupendous crime for the lack of education. To reduce such criminal activities, criminals have to learn the lesson from teacher residing in prison. As a result, they would be able to get work after passing their imprisonment. I, holistically, agree with this point of view, but some other measures must be taken to minimize the crime rate as well as the building better future of criminals. To begin with, it is well said that all the criminals should provide better erudition when they are in the prison. This is because, after leaving prison, they will be able to build their career with their skills. This, also, invariably, helps not only to do crime again, but it also succours other people who have intention to do crime. For example, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of crime rate has been decreased, since the government is focusing on education of the offenders when they lock at the four walls. Therefore, criminal minds are participating in the field of businesses and jobs, other people are also getting inspired by them. Other more solution to the crime rate would be that from early childhood days, teachers should teach about the detrimental effects of committing crime so that the authority must include criminal books to the school curriculum. The countermeasure would, probably, curb the crime rate, for instance, that offender who murdered someone, he/she must sentence to death. The reason is that other people would learn a great lesson of committing heinous crimes. Moreover, the government has to be strict to a certain extent in declaring punishment such as long life imprisonment, imprisonment with hard work beside capital punishment. Ergo, only education in prison is not the solution to educate criminal, another method must be applied to reduce the crime. To conclude, although most of the offenders have limited education so that they do atrocious work. It is a better measure that teaching in prison may help them to limit crime and enhances better future. However, from my perspective, beside this, child education, severe punishment would be the other best solution to this menace.
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, in the USA, studies have shown that 99% of
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crime
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rate
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would be that from early childhood days, teachers should teach about the detrimental effects of committing
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books to the school curriculum. The countermeasure would,
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have limited
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that they do atrocious work. It is a
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better
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education
, severe punishment would be the
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best solution to this menace.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As a result of tourism and the increasing number of travelling there is an growing demand for more flights What problems does this have on the environment What measures could be taken to solve the problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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