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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity . some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. N0n2
Some would argue that artists should be provided with complete freedom so they can use their talent fully. This essay completely agrees with this statement because without having full freedom they will not be able to produce a world-class performance and they will be able to produce various kinds of works. Singers, painters or any other artists cannot produce a top-quality result in their field if they are not given total freedom. This is to say that when they are not distracted from other things, such as what would public think or would their work would be banned by the government, they produce excellent results. For example, many people have emerged as memers on social media since the ban on memes has been lifted in Pakistan and more and more people are making things that amused the public. Liberation from distractions allows them to produce a variety of things. This is because when they are more focused on their work they contemplate about it that how can they improve their performance by doing innovation in them. For instance, in first-world countries, there is no restriction on making any kind of movies so their filmmakers produce films on numerous topics rather than on the same topics that are what happens in most developing nations, where the government does not allow artists to work freely. In conclusion, some people think that artists should be given complete freedom to extract the top performance from them. This essay strongly agrees with this because distractions prevent artists from giving their all what they have and freedom will allow them to produce a different kind of works.
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without having full
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they will not be able to
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a world-
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performance and
they will be able to
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produce
various kinds of works.

Singers, painters or any other
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artists
cannot
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produce
a top-quality result in their field if they are not
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given
total
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freedom
. This is to say that when they are not distracted from other things, such as what would public
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think
or would their
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work
would
be banned
by the
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government
, they
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produce
excellent results.
For example
,
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people
have emerged as
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memers
on social media since the ban on memes has
been lifted
in Pakistan and more and more
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people
are making things that amused the public.

Liberation from distractions
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allows
them to
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produce
a variety of things. This is
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because
when they are more focused on their
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work
they contemplate about it that how can they
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improve
their performance by doing innovation in them.
For instance
, in
first
-world countries, there is no restriction on making any kind of movies
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so
their filmmakers
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produce
films on numerous topics
rather
than on the same topics that are what happens in most developing nations, where the
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government
does not
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allow
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artists
to
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work
freely
.

In conclusion
,
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people
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think
that
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artists
should be
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given
complete
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freedom
to extract the top performance from them. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with this
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distractions
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artists
from giving their all what they have and
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freedom
will
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allow
them to
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different
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IELTS essay Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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