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Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? JBW5

In this 21st century famous people have the media follow up on their day to day activity, this is unavoidable and personally the media cannot be blamed because it’s their job to source for solid Information so as to get popularity. Their fame has made them popular which attracts more fan base and this fans want to know everything including their personal lives. My point of view on this explains the fact that as a celebrity you are open to the people, therefore they will always be there to know what happens in their lives. They cannot have privacy because it’s what they signed up for. Fans will like to take pictures with them, and also want to get close. Hollywood celebrities most especially have a large fan, people want to meet them get to know how they got successful also. I once met Justin Bieber at a party in Los Angeles I was so happy and I took a picture with him although he didn’t want to, he disguised so no one will disturb but I could still recognize him. In conclusion famous people should always be open to their fans because without your fans you won’t be popular.

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famous
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people
 have the media follow up on their It appears that two hyphens are missing.day-to-day
day to day
 activity, this is unavoidable and personally
 the media cannot be blamed
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because
 it’s their job to source for solid Information 'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"to
so as to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 popularity. Their fame has made them popular which attracts more fan base and this fans You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneedwish
want
 to know everything including their personal This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
. My point of view on this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interprets
explains
 the fact that as a celebrity you are open to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
, therefore
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lives
. They cannot have privacy This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it’s what they signed up for. Fans will like to take pictures with them, and also
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want
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 close. The genitive is possibly missing.Hollywood's celebrities
Hollywood celebrities
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 have a large fan, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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want
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 them This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 to know how they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 successful also
. I once met Justin Bieber at a party in Los Angeles I was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 happy and I took a picture with him although he didn’t You use this word too often, consider replacing it withneedwish
want
 to, he disguised This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 no one will disturb This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I could still
 recognize him. In conclusion
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 should always be open to their fans This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 without your fans you won’t be popular. 