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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Personal and private life of celebrities is a hot topic among people. Due to technology advancement, press and social media disclose their life in an excessive amount. There is a discussion whether famous people privacy should be protected or not. On one hand, some people believe that the press and social media interfere too much with their personal life. Take Lady Diana as an example. Lady Diana was the former wife of Prince Charles. People were curious about her private life. As a result, press spent a massive amount of time to report her life. Unfortunately, she died in a car accident in 1997 as she wanted to get away paparazzi. This tragedy shows that the media is bad to celebrities' life. However, it is inevitable that private life of famous people is disclosed by media. They are the well-known people and role model of people. It is their responsibility to show their good behaviour to the public. In 2007, there is a MeToo movement in the USA. Hollywood actresses complained the experienced director and actors about the sex harrassment and sex abuse towards them. It created a great reaction. Many famous people have been arrested and charged. This proves that famous people do not mean they have authority to commit crime. Media is responsible to report the fact. We can see that there are advantage and disvantage on reporting celebrities' life. It affects their life but it also construct the value of society.
Personal and private
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life
of celebrities is a hot topic among
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people
. Due to technology advancement, press and social
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media
disclose their
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life
in an excessive amount. There is a discussion whether
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famous
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people
privacy should
be protected
or not.

On one hand,
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some
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people
believe that the press and social
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media
interfere too much with their personal
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life
. Take Lady Diana as an example. Lady Diana was the former wife of Prince Charles.
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People
were curious about her private
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life
.
As a result
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life
. Unfortunately, she
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died
in a car accident in 1997 as she wanted to
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get
away paparazzi. This tragedy
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shows
that the
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media
is
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bad
to celebrities' life.

However
, it is inevitable that private
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life
of
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famous
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people
is disclosed
by
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media
. They are the well-known
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people
and role model of
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people
. It is their responsibility to
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show
their
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good
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behaviour
to the public. In 2007, there is a
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MeToo
movement in the USA.
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Hollywood actresses
complained the experienced director and actors about the sex
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harrassment
and sex abuse towards them. It created a great reaction.
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Many
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famous
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people
have
been arrested
and charged. This proves that
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famous
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people
do not mean they have authority to commit crime.
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Media
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is
responsible to report the fact.

We can
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see
that there are advantage and
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disvantage
on reporting celebrities'
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life
. It affects their
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life
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but
it
also
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construct
the value of society.
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IELTS essay Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
244 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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