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Advertising encourages consumers to buy in quantity rather than promoting quality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertisements influence consumers a lot and they tend to buy more unnecessary stuff. Due to promotions, people are emphasizing on buying in bulk capacity rather than giving importance to quality. I disagree with the notion of buying in large volumes, ignoring standards of the brand. In this essay, I will explain how adverts are influencing customers and misguiding them. Firstly, in today's world, there is no place we are free from advertisements. Commercials are a regular interference in most television shows. Billboards, social media adverts and deals via messages are indirectly increasing the buying capacity of people day by day. Although this is a positive trend to boost the economy, consumers are compromising on the quality. For example, we often see companies advertising discounts, as a result, customers tend to buy discounted products more, ignoring the standards. However, people need to do basic research on the product before buying, so that they do not regret on the product bought later. Hence, significance must be given to how good is the item being purchased rather than the quantity that is being offered. Secondly, out of all age group of buyers, the younger generation is the easiest target. They are attracted to the concept shown in advertisement and unwanted pressure is built on parents to buy them. For instance, commercials on televisions especially related to toys, force parents to buy the product for kids, even though they are of poor quality. Children do not understand the concept of quality goods, instead, they are fascinated by the advertised story. Therefore, a regulation needs to be introduced so that concerned authorities verify deals being promoted to customers. In conclusion, one who is purchasing is always in a dilemma whether to buy what is presented in adverts or to buy based on standards. I agree with the notion of giving significance to the quality of goods rather than emphasizing on the quantity that is available as durability increases when the item is of good grades.
Advertisements influence consumers a
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lot and
they tend to
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buy
more unnecessary stuff. Due to promotions,
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people
are emphasizing on
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buying
in bulk capacity
rather
than giving importance to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
. I disagree with the notion of
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buying
in large volumes, ignoring standards of the brand. In this essay, I will
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explain
how adverts are influencing customers and misguiding them.

Firstly
, in
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today
's world, there is no place we are free from advertisements. Commercials are a regular interference in most television
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
. Billboards, social media adverts and deals via messages are
indirectly
increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buying
capacity of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
day by day. Although this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
trend to boost the economy, consumers are compromising on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
.
For example
, we
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often
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see
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companies
advertising discounts,
as a result
, customers tend to
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buy
discounted
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products
more, ignoring the standards.
However
,
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people
need to do basic research on the
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product
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before
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buying
,
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so
that they do not regret on the
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product
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bought
later.
Hence
, significance
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must
be
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given
to how
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good
is the item being
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purchased
rather
than the quantity
that is
being offered
.

Secondly
, out of all age group of buyers, the younger generation is the easiest target. They
are attracted
to the concept shown in advertisement and unwanted pressure
is built
on parents to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
them.
For instance
, commercials on televisions
especially
related to toys, force parents to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
for kids,
even though
they are of poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
. Children do not understand the concept of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
,
instead
, they
are fascinated
by the advertised story.
Therefore
, a regulation needs to
be introduced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that concerned authorities verify deals
being promoted
to customers.

In conclusion
, one who is purchasing is always in a dilemma whether to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
what
is presented
in adverts or to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
based on standards. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the notion of giving significance to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
rather
than emphasizing on the quantity
that is
available as durability increases when the item is of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
grades.
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IELTS essay Advertising encourages consumers to buy in quantity rather than promoting quality.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
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