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Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers? v.1

Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers? v. 1
The world has witnessed many rapid changes in almost all areas including education, after the invention of the computer and this tool has become an essential part in many new sectors. The education sector is no exception and the modern education system is so deeply rooted in the computer and internet technology that without these two, modern educations would become meaningless. Who could have thought only 40 years ago that computer would be used in rural classrooms, modern online based distance education system and in medical colleges? In fact, the modernization in education was possible because of the invention and widespread uses of the computer and internet technology. From physics to aeronautical engineering, chemistry to modern arts, computers are used in everywhere. A complex chemical reaction can be simulated using a computer, the trainee pilots can simulate the real flight in a computer system and even the students in fine arts can learn the digital arts which are created using computers. The changes in education and uses of computers have become a common phenomenon nowadays and a school without a computer lab is considered a primitive one. Math, Physics, Chemistry, engineering, medical, business & commerce subjects can all be better taught using computers. Even arts subjects can be better taught using computers. Subjects that directly involve computers like computer science, computer engineering, electrical engineering, graphics designing etc. can’t be conducted without the help of computers. There are still some aspects of education that require human touches and involvements and can’t be done using a computer. For instance, teaching morality, discipline and responsibility are done by teachers apart from delivering lectures on subject matters and that can’t be done using machines. A student learns many more aspects from the teachers and classmates and that can’t be done using computers. The creativity and leadership quality are two other aspects that are nurtured and inspired by humans and machine can’t take responsibilities for these issues. In summary, computers can enhance the scope of better education in almost all of the subjects except teaching some values and moralities of life that can only be taught by humans.
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in almost all areas including
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education
, after the invention of the computer and this tool has become an essential part in
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many
new sectors. The
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education
sector is no exception and the
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modern
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education
system is
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so
deeply
rooted
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in the computer
and internet technology that without these two,
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modern
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educations
would become meaningless.

Who could have
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thought
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only
40 years ago that computer would be
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used
in rural classrooms,
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modern
online based distance
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education
system and in medical colleges? In fact, the modernization in
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education
was possible
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because
of the invention and widespread
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uses
of the computer and internet technology.

From physics to aeronautical
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engineering
, chemistry to
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modern
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arts
, computers are
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used
in everywhere. A complex chemical reaction can
be simulated
using a computer, the trainee pilots can simulate the real flight in a computer system and even the students in fine
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arts
can learn the digital
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arts
which
are created
using computers. The
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changes
in
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education
and
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uses
of computers have become a common phenomenon nowadays and a school without a computer lab
is considered
a primitive one. Math, Physics, Chemistry,
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engineering
, medical, business & commerce
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subjects
can all be better taught using computers. Even
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arts
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subjects
can be better taught using computers.
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Subjects
that
directly
involve computers like computer science, computer
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engineering
, electrical
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engineering
, graphics designing etc.
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can’t
be conducted
without the
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help
of computers.

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still
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some
aspects of
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education
that require human touches and involvements and
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can’t
be done
using a computer.
For instance
, teaching morality, discipline and responsibility
are done
by teachers apart from delivering lectures on
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subject
matters and that
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can’t
be done
using machines. A student learns
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many
more aspects from the teachers and classmates and that
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can’t
be done
using computers. The creativity and leadership quality are two other aspects that
are nurtured
and inspired by humans and machine
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can’t
take responsibilities for these issues.

In summary, computers can enhance the scope of better
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education
in almost
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all of the
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subjects
except teaching
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some
values and moralities of life that can
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only
be taught
by humans.
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IELTS essay Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
353 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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