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archaeologists finding evidence that chocolate dates around for about 1500 years ago

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This passage is about archaeologists finding evidence that chocolate dates around for about 1500 years ago. But at the end of the passage says that they later found other evidence of an earlier cocoa-producing society. It is worth mentioning that not everyone accepts it, so this is a problem that they need to learn more about. "Here, they claim, is proof of another society making cacao drinks even earlier. Not everyone accepts their evidence, so it seems further investigation is necessary".
This passage is about archaeologists finding evidence that chocolate dates around for about 1500 years ago.
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of the passage says that they later found other evidence of an earlier cocoa-producing society. It is worth mentioning that not everyone accepts it,
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this is a problem that they need to learn more about.
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
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Here, they claim, is proof of another society making cacao drinks even earlier. Not everyone accepts their evidence,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it seems
further
investigation is necessary
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
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IELTS essay archaeologists finding evidence that chocolate dates around for about 1500 years ago

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  American English
1 paragraphs
81 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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