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archaeologists discover proof that chocolate has been present for roughly 1500 years

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In this paragraph, archaeologists discover proof that chocolate has been present for roughly 1500 years. However, it is stated at the conclusion of the passage that they later discovered further evidence of an older cocoa-making civilisation. It's worth noting that not everyone accepts it, so this is a problem they'll have to research more. (Line 8, 9: "They argue that this is proof of another civilization preparing cacao beverages much earlier. Because not everyone believes their evidence, it appears that additional research is required ").
In this paragraph, archaeologists discover proof that chocolate has been present for roughly 1500 years.
However
, it
is stated
at the conclusion of the passage that they later discovered
further
evidence of an older cocoa-making
Possible spelling mistake. 'civilisation' is British English.
civilisation
. It's worth noting that not everyone accepts it,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
this is a problem they'll
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
research more.

(Line 8, 9:
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
They argue that this is proof of another
Do not mix variants of the same word ('civilization' and 'civilisation') within a single text.
civilization
preparing cacao beverages much earlier.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
not everyone believes their evidence, it appears that additional research
is required
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
).
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IELTS essay archaeologists discover proof that chocolate has been present for roughly 1500 years

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
85 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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