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Aquarium and wildlife sanctuaries are seen as sources of Education, Entertainment, and life-saving research. However, confining animals this way is being criticized. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Aquarium and wildlife sanctuaries are seen as sources of Education, Entertainment, and life-saving research. However, confining animals this way is being criticized. VY50D
The perspective that whether animals should be housed in a zoo or not has sparked a heated debate among many. In this essay, I will shed some light on opposing sides of this viewpoint and then provide my own opinion. On the one hand, there are compelling reasons for wildlife to not be kept in zoos. First of all, wild animals are happier in their natural habitats as they can lead their lives by freely roaming around the forest, experiencing the various seasons, and being around other animals. In addition, they will not feel like captives bounded by an area in a zoo. For instance, most wild animals such as lions, tigers, monkeys, et cetera seem more active and healthy in the forest as compared to the cages in zoos. Therefore, they can reap the benefits of nature by not being in confinement. On the other hand, there are some merits to having zoos. The primary benefit is that it can serve as a spectacle for human beings to see many different wild species such as birds, mammals, reptiles, fishes, et cetera all in one place. In addition, people gain immense knowledge of wildlife by observing them closely; indeed, knowledge is wealth. Moreover, wild animals will not be preyed on by their predators by being in zoos. For example, animals are kept apart in a zoo so that one doesn’t feed on another, whereas a lion pride can hunt, kill and consume a zebra in a forest. Having considered a range of arguments, I firmly believe that wild species should not be held in zoos; animals should enjoy their natural habitats and not be kept as captives.
The perspective that whether
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animals
should
be housed
in a zoo or not has sparked a heated debate among
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many
. In this essay, I will shed
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some
light on opposing sides of this viewpoint and then provide my
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own
opinion.

On the one hand, there are compelling reasons for wildlife to not be
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kept
in zoos.
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First of all
, wild
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animals
are happier in their natural habitats as they can lead their
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lives
by
freely
roaming around the forest, experiencing the various seasons, and being around other
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animals
.
In addition
, they will not feel like captives bounded by an area in a zoo.
For instance
, most wild
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animals
such as lions, tigers, monkeys,
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et cetera
seem more active and healthy in the forest as compared to the cages in zoos.
Therefore
, they can reap the benefits of nature by not being in confinement.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
merits to having zoos. The primary benefit is that it can serve as a spectacle for human beings to
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see
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many
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different
wild species such as birds, mammals, reptiles, fishes,
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et cetera
all in one place.
In addition
,
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people
gain immense knowledge of wildlife by observing them
closely
;
indeed
, knowledge is wealth.
Moreover
, wild
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animals
will not
be preyed
on by their predators by being in zoos.
For example
,
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animals
are
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kept
apart in a zoo
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so
that one doesn’t feed on another, whereas a lion pride can hunt, kill and consume a zebra in a forest.

Having considered a range of arguments, I
firmly
believe that wild species should not
be held
in zoos;
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animals
should enjoy their natural habitats and not be
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kept
as captives.
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IELTS essay Aquarium and wildlife sanctuaries are seen as sources of Education, Entertainment, and life-saving research. However, confining animals this way is being criticized.

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