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any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nature and nurture have played a prominent role in the growth and prosperity of human beings and have always been controversial issues. It remains to be seen whether certain talents for sport or music can be inherited or they can be taught. It is a well-established fact that some people are born with innate talents. In all probability, these people inherit such skills associated with sport, art or music from their parents or ancestors. As a result, they have natural superiority which cannot be compared to those picking up skills through a great teacher. This is why a talented son of a brilliant musician has music appreciation and he is good at it. However, many people argue that one can flourish by training and practicing, irrespective of having an inborn ability. By way of illustration, consider many artists, musicians or athletes who do not have had any successful family background, but their passions and perseverance have led to acquiring certain skills and attaining more success. I tend to think that a combination of both training and natural talent is essential to success. Education systems are based on the belief that all children can be taught to gain different skills. True as it may seem, biological factors cannot be ignored. Without natural talent, a hard-working student would not be mastered in art, sport or music, and without the training, a child would not develop specific talents. Therefore, great training and natural talent are closely linked and it is not possible to examine one of them without considering the other ones.
Nature and nurture have played a prominent role in the growth and prosperity of human beings and have always been controversial issues. It remains to be
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inherited or
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inherit such
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skills
associated with sport, art or
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music
from their parents or ancestors.
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, they have
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natural
superiority which cannot
be compared
to those picking up
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skills
through a great teacher. This is why a talented son of a brilliant musician has
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music
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appreciation and
he is
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,
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argue that one can flourish by
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training
and practicing, irrespective of having an inborn ability. By way of illustration, consider
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many
artists, musicians or athletes who do not have had any successful family background,
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their passions and perseverance have led to acquiring certain
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skills
and attaining more success.

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that a combination of both
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and
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natural
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talent
is essential to success. Education systems
are based
on the belief that all children can
be taught
to gain
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different
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skills
. True as it may seem, biological factors cannot be
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ignored
. Without
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natural
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talent
, a
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hard
-working student would not
be mastered
in art, sport or
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music
, and without the
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training
, a child would not develop specific
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talents
.
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, great
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training
and
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natural
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talent
are
closely
linked and it is not possible to examine one of them without considering the other ones.
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IELTS essay any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
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