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Animal on the verge of extinction

Animal on the verge of extinction VQNpA

It is essential for healthy and balanced environment to maintain food chain. But, humans are destroying forests and killing animals for their benefits. This essay will provide the reasons of these causes and probable solutions to tackle the concern. First of all, it is a global issue where most animals are on the verge of extinction. Every living species inevitably play a crucial role in maintaining smoother nature. However, people tend to benefit from the nature by illegal deforestation. They destroy animal habitats to acquire land for farming. As a result, wild animals lose their shelter and food sources, which eventually lead them towards extinction slowly. Moreover, poaching is quite popular among some tribes living near to forests. The high demand of animal meat in some countries promote hunting. Practice of illegal hunting is carried out to kill the rare animals for to sale their skin in the international market. Same can be tackled if government intervene in the issue. At first, forest officials should prepare the database focusing endangered animal species. Strict laws and no deforestation policy should be taken in account and environment protection awareness campaigns should be governed to make it more feasible to understand. Animal based cosmetics and fashion products should be banned to achieve success at higher level in preserving animals and their natural habitat. For instance, government of India has taken initiative to restore the tigers by providing them their natural habitat and the results are positive. In conclusion, saving rare species for the future requires strict laws and support from the authority.

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But
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animals
 for their benefits. This essay will provide the reasons of these causes and probable solutions to tackle the concern.

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destroy
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 habitats to acquire land for farming. As a result
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 lose their shelter and food sources, which eventually
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. Moreover
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some
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some
 countries promote hunting. Practice of illegal hunting is carried
 out to kill the rare You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 for to sale their skin in the international market. Same can be tackled
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government
 intervene in the issue.

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, forest officials should prepare the database focusing endangered You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
animal
 species. Strict laws and no deforestation policy should be taken
 in account and environment protection awareness campaigns should be governed
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make
 it more feasible to understand. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnaturalbodily
Animal
 based cosmetics and fashion products should be banned
 to achieve success at higher level in preserving You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpetbeastcreature
animals
 and their natural habitat. For instance
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 of India has taken initiative to restore the tigers by providing them their natural habitat and the results are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
.

In conclusion
, saving rare species for the future requires strict laws and support from the authority. 