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Ancient India and the story of primitive mankind

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The world saw its first human way back than anyone could imagine. The primitive humans who walked the land would never thought of today's development and here we are in ancient India. People here are very much advanced as compare to the rest of the world. They do trade, celebrate festivals and no one has a fixed belief. The people of this time live in peace and harmony at the same time they have big desires, that lead them to do certain things, which are otherwise impossible.
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's development and here we are in ancient India.
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much advanced as compare to the rest of the world. They do trade, celebrate festivals and no one has a
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fixed
belief. The
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people
of this time
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live
in peace and harmony at the same time they have
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desires, that lead them to do certain things, which are
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IELTS essay Ancient India and the story of primitive mankind

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
87 words
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