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An old friend of yours is coming to visit your city. You had planned to meet him at theairport, but something has come up and you will not be able to make it there on time. Write to your friend. In your letter Explain the situation Offer to make alte v.1

An old friend of yours is coming to visit your city. You had planned to meet him at theairport, but something has come up and you will not be able to make it there on time. Write to your friend. In your letter Explain the situation Offer to make alte v. 1
Nowadays, the other art forms are considered more significant as compared to movies by majority of masses. I am completely against the notion because cinema is one of the best sources to convey information, and even illiterate individuals can learn through it. To commence with, films are the best way to portray any story and event that occurred in the history because the visuals not only create interest of people in the story but also help them to understand the situation. For example, in a recent survey, it is found that almost 70 percent of people in the world watch movies to learn about history rather than reading it from the books because they find it difficult to read and understand, so they prefer cinema. Hence, films play a substantial role to convey information. Moreover, movies can cater to a larger audience than other art forms as the maximum number of people prefer to watch it rather than going to any exhibition. Besides, the illiterate masses can also learn about history and culture through it. For instance, the literacy rate in India is approximately 70 percent, and these literate people can read about their forefathers from the books, but the rest 30 percent cannot do it since they do not know how to read. Consequently, films are essential to display the past. Therefore, it is apparent that movies are also a significant form of art. To summarize, literature and paintings are an excellent form of art, however less important as compared with the cinema. In my opinion, movies are necessary as it portrays the events as well as helps everyone to gain knowledge.
Nowadays, the other art
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forms
are considered
more significant as compared to
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movies
by majority of masses. I am completely against the notion
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because
cinema is one of the best sources to convey information, and even illiterate individuals can learn through it.

To commence with, films are the best way to portray any story and
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event
that occurred in the history
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because
the visuals not
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only
create interest of
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people
in the story
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but
also
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help
them to understand the situation.
For example
, in a recent survey, it
is found
that almost 70 percent of
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people
in the world
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watch
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movies
to learn about history
rather
than reading it from the books
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because
they find it difficult to read and understand,
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so
they prefer cinema.
Hence
, films play a substantial role to convey information.

Moreover
,
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movies
can cater to a larger audience than other art
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forms
as the maximum number of
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people
prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
it
rather
than going to any exhibition.
Besides
, the illiterate masses can
also
learn about history and culture through it.
For instance
, the literacy rate in India is approximately 70 percent, and these literate
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people
can read about their forefathers from the books,
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but
the rest 30 percent cannot do it since they do not know how to read.
Consequently
, films are essential to display the past.
Therefore
, it is apparent that
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movies
are
also
a significant
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form
of art.

To summarize
, literature and paintings are an excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
form
of art,
however
less
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
as compared with the cinema. In my opinion,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
are necessary as it portrays the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
everyone to gain knowledge.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Federico Fellini

IELTS essay An old friend of yours is coming to visit your city. You had planned to meet him at theairport, but something has come up and you will not be able to make it there on time. Write to your friend. In your letter Explain the situation Offer to make alte v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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