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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? lD8b
Technology today is going faster than ever before. There are laptops, tv´s and smart phones everywhere. It does no matter if you are a grown man or woman, a teenager or a small child, most people can have access to these technologies without a problem. All of them serve greatly in communicating and being in touch. However, there are some parents who think smart phones should not be given to their children, and forbid them, and I agree with their opinion. I believe smart phones are a great tool for people to communicate, but I understand why some parents would not want to give their children a smart phone. First of all, having internet access might be problematic because it is distracting. If children are allowed to take their phones to school, they might not pay attention to classes if they are more entertained with what the WiFi has to offer. There are hardly any restrictions on what they can surf on the web, and it is not the teacher´s job to be confiscating phones. Having a smart phone also means a kid or a teenager can have access to Facebook or Instagram or any kind of social media, and this can be known to cause severe cases of bullying at school. Anyone can pretend to be someone they are not or a single picture can give the wrong impression, which can cause more probelms. It also seems that people of all ages tend to ignore those who stand in front of them when having a smart phone. Social interactions are becoming less important in the face of technology. Children might begin to loose their social skills if their face it stuck 24/7 to a phone, a tv or a computer. I do not disagree that a smart phone functions well in keeping children and their parents in touch in case of an emergency, but a smart phone can cause more problems than solutions. Children can stay in touch with a simple cell phone, without internet access until they are of a certain age. I would propose that they are given a smart phone when they have become responsible people and know that there is a time for everything in life, similar to a rite of passage.
Technology
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before
. There are laptops,
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tv´s
and
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smart
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phones
everywhere. It does no matter if you are a grown
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man
or woman, a
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teenager
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small
child, most
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people
can have
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access
to these technologies without a problem. All of them serve
greatly
in communicating and being in touch.
However
, there are
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some
parents who
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think
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smart
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phones
should not be
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given
to their
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children
, and forbid them, and I
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agree
with their opinion.

I believe
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smart
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phones
are a great tool for
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people
to communicate,
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I understand why
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some
parents would not want to give their
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children
a
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smart
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phone
.
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, having internet
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access
might be problematic
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because
it is distracting. If
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children
are
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allowed
to take their
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phones
to school, they might not pay attention to classes if they are more entertained with what the
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WiFi
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has to
offer. There are hardly any restrictions on what they can surf on the web, and it is not the
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teacher´s
job to be confiscating phones.

Having a
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smart
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phone
also
means a kid or a
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teenager
can have
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access
to Facebook or Instagram or any kind of social media, and this can
be known
to cause severe cases of bullying at school. Anyone can pretend to be someone they are not or a single picture can give the
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wrong
impression, which can cause more
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probelms
.

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also
seems that
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people
of all ages tend to
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ignore
those who stand in front of them when having a
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smart
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phone
. Social interactions are becoming less
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important
in the face of technology.
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might
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begin
to
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loose
their social
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skills
if their face it stuck 24/7 to a
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phone
, a
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tv
or a computer.

I do not disagree that a
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smart
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phone
functions well in keeping
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children
and their parents in touch in case of an emergency,
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but
a
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smart
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phone
can cause more problems than solutions.
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Children
can stay in touch with a simple cell
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phone
, without internet
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access
until they are of a certain age. I would propose that they are
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given
a
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smart
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phone
when they have become responsible
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people
and know that there is a time for everything in life, similar to a rite of passage.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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