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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v.10

An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 10
There is an opinion that more and more schools are no longer using traditional books and printed books rather they are providing tablets and computers for their students. While this phenomenon has some benefits, it also has its adverse effects. The major advantage of providing students with technological equipments rather than traditional books is that it exposes them to a practical knowledge. It means that they are exposed to practical on how to use search engines to source for information which is not within the school curriculum with just a few cliques on the mouse. For example, while reading their text on the internet, they would easily search for meanings of new words and also read up about it. Apart from this, it makes learning interesting to the students who has learning issues because animations and colours makes it captivating thereby making it easy to assimilate. To illustrate, children who has dyslexia learn better with computer gadgets. Despite the advantages, these trends has adverse effects too. First and foremost, excessive exposure of students to screen could lead to poor vision. That is to say that they have to constantly look at the computers if they want to study and do assignments and it is glaring that some rays are emitted from these screen. Consequently, this could lead to dry eye syndrome. Besides that, tablets and computers could distract children from their studies since there are alot of games and videos that could be accessed. Not only will children play computer games, but they could watch adult movies through some websites instead of reading with them. In conclusion, although there are merits of using advanced learning facilities such as computer and tablets to learn, there are demerits as well. Contrary to these positive effects such as widening search options and improved learning facilities, the side impacts includes: deterioration of sights and accessing undesired websites.
There is an opinion that more and more schools are no longer using traditional books and printed books
rather
they are providing tablets and computers for their
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students
. While this phenomenon has
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some
benefits, it
also
has its adverse effects.

The major advantage of providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
with technological equipments
rather
than traditional books is that it exposes them to
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "practical knowledge".
a practical knowledge
. It means that they
are exposed
to practical on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
search engines to source for information which is not within the school curriculum with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
a few cliques on the mouse.
For example
, while reading their text on the internet, they would
easily
search for meanings of new words and
also
read up about it. Apart from this, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
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learning
interesting to the
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students
who
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has
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learning
issues
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because
animations and
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colours
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it captivating thereby making it easy to assimilate. To illustrate, children who
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has
dyslexia learn better with computer gadgets.

Despite the advantages, these trends has adverse effects too.
First
and foremost, excessive exposure of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to screen could lead to poor vision.
That is
to say that they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
constantly
look at the computers if they want to study and do assignments and it is glaring that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
rays
are emitted
from these screen.
Consequently
, this could lead to dry eye syndrome.
Besides
that, tablets and computers could distract children from their studies since there
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are alot
of games and videos that could
be accessed
. Not
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only
will children play computer games,
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but
they could
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watch
adult movies through
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some
websites
instead
of reading with them.

In conclusion
, although there are merits of using advanced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
facilities such as computer and tablets to learn, there are demerits
as well
. Contrary to these
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positive
effects such as widening search options and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
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learning
facilities, the side impacts includes: deterioration of sights and accessing undesired websites.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
8
Overall Band Score
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