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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developer countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developer countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? 9ydp
More and more intelligent people are preferring to settle down in overdeveloped countries rather than their own poorer hometown because of better living standards. As a result, the very underdeveloped and least developed countries struggling to improve due to lack of clever citizens. I personally believe that the government themselves must handle the issue since brain drain only suffers them. The main problem faced by countries because of losing such people are the only dwellers who can really make their hometown better place. In other words, if majority of highly intelligent people go overseas to work, population will be supposed to give even charge of the country to empty-headed people. Government jobs for example, such as deputy, ministry or even presidency. To address the problem the government must take the responsibility. With power of them salaries must be raised, better working conditions and laboratories with necessary equipment should be provided. On the flipside, moving to highly industrialized country may start a chain reaction among people. Which means that if one leaves his country and earn much more money than his compatriots, his friends, relatives and all his acquaintances may want to be like him as well. Take “Google” for example, everyone wants to work here because of the very chain reaction. To tackle this problem branches or franchises of these kind of companies or even universities can be bought to the non-developed countries by signing some contracts in the way of development of such places. To conclude, individuals go to developed countries to improve themselves, and it’s probably impossible to stop it. But with allocating some money from GDP on the mentioned suggestions, government can reduce number of migrants.
More and more intelligent
people
are preferring
to settle down in overdeveloped
countries
rather
than their
own
poorer hometown
because
of better living standards.
As a result
, the
very
underdeveloped and least developed
countries
struggling to
improve
due to lack of clever citizens. I
personally
believe that the
government
themselves
must
handle the issue since brain drain
only
suffers them.

The main problem faced by
countries
because
of losing such
people
are the
only
dwellers who can
really
make
their hometown better place.
In other words
, if
majority of
highly
intelligent
people
go overseas to work, population will
be supposed
to give even charge of the
country
to empty-headed
people
.
Government
jobs
for example
, such as deputy, ministry or even presidency. To address the problem the
government
must
take the responsibility. With power of them salaries
must
be raised
, better working conditions and laboratories with necessary equipment should
be provided
.

On the
flipside
, moving to
highly
industrialized
country
may
start
a chain reaction among
people
. Which means that if one
leaves
his
country
and earn much more money than his compatriots, his friends, relatives and all his acquaintances may want to be like him
as well
. Take “Google”
for example
, everyone wants to work here
because
of the
very
chain reaction. To tackle this problem branches or franchises of
these kind
of
companies
or even universities can be
bought
to the non-developed
countries
by signing
some
contracts in the way of development of such places.

To conclude
, individuals go to developed
countries
to
improve
themselves, and it’s
probably
impossible to
stop
it.
But
with allocating
some
money from GDP on the mentioned suggestions,
government
can
reduce
number of migrants.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developer countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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