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An essay to introduce yourself. What is your background in English? what do you want to tell the teacher?

An essay to introduce yourself. What is your background in English? what do you want to tell the teacher? 56a2P
My name is Pongsakorn Poovantana. I was born in Bangkok, Thailand. I am an international student in Canada. My parents are both working in Thailand and I don’t want my life to be like them. I hope I could spend my life in Canada. I hope I could apply be a permanent residence in Canada. I am considering a career in chemistry such as; a chemist, researcher, or chemical engineering. I am taking this course because obviously it is a requirement. The reason that I chose this course among other English course is because that I think Composition will help me to boost my academic skills in every aspect of English. When I was choosing this course, I have one concern about this course. I am a bit worried that my grade would be low because I am an international student. My aim for this course is to be able to use, write, read, and speak English fluently. I also want to get a high mark in this course. I studied English since I was in elementary grade in my country, but more professionally in middle school. In grade 10, I took an EAL composition 11 course and Composition 11. As I mentioned, my goal for English course is to be able to write well, read faster, speak more fluently, and develop my analyzing skills. Personally, I hate writing and reading parts in English. I always get bored every time that I have to write an essay or read a novel. My favorite part in English is to watch movies in English and answer some questions. My challenges about English course are writing and reading. For example, when I’m writing an essay, I never thought of grammar, so my essay is messy. I also don’t like to write a long essay on paper. I would prefer typing my essay and hand it in because my bad and messy handwriting. I have my laptop that I could bring to school everyday. I’m also a slow reader, so I would spend more time on reading a paragraph that others. I have a plan to take an IELTS exam this coming April, and I am so worried about it, especially writing and reading part. IELTS is important for my university application next year and I am aiming for a band score of 7. 0. I hope this class could help me develop and prepare my reading and writing skills before I will take an exam. I also hope that this class could help me to practice my speaking and listening skills
My name is
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Pongsakorn
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Poovantana
. I
was born
in Bangkok, Thailand. I am an international student in Canada. My parents are both working in Thailand and I don’t want my life to be like them. I
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hope
I could spend my life in Canada. I
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hope
I could
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apply be
a permanent residence in Canada.
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I
am considering a career in chemistry such as; a chemist, researcher, or chemical engineering.
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I
am taking this
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course
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because
obviously
it is a requirement. The reason that I chose this
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course
among other English
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course
is
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because
that I
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think
Composition will
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help
me to boost my academic
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skills
in every aspect of English. When I was choosing this
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course
, I have one concern about this
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course
. I am a bit worried that my grade would be low
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because
I am an international student. My aim for this
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course
is to be able to
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use
,
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write
, read, and speak English
fluently
. I
also
want to
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get
a high mark in this
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course
. I studied English since I was in elementary grade in my country,
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but
more
professionally
in middle school. In grade 10, I took an EAL composition 11
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course
and Composition 11. As I mentioned, my goal for English
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course
is to be able to
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write
well, read faster, speak more
fluently
, and develop my analyzing
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skills
.
Personally
, I hate
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writing
and
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reading
parts in English. I always
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get
bored every time that I
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have to
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write
an
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essay
or read a novel. My favorite part in English is to
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watch
movies in English and answer
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some
questions. My challenges about English
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course
are
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writing
and
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reading
.
For example
, when I’m
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writing
an
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essay
, I never
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thought
of grammar,
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so
my
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essay
is messy. I
also
don’t like to
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write
a long
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essay
on paper. I would prefer typing my
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essay
and hand it in
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because
my
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bad
and messy handwriting.
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I
have my laptop that I could bring to school
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
.
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I
’m
also
a slow reader,
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so
I would spend more time on
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reading
a paragraph that others.
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I
have a plan to take an IELTS exam this coming April, and I am
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so
worried about it,
especially
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writing
and
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reading
part. IELTS is
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important
for my university application
next
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year and
I am aiming for a band score of 7. 0. I
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hope
this
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class
could
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help
me develop and prepare my
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reading
and
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writing
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skills
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before
I will take an exam. I
also
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hope
that this
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class
could
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help
me to practice my speaking and listening
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
skills
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IELTS essay An essay to introduce yourself. What is your background in English? what do you want to tell the teacher?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
427 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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