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An English teenager is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay programme. Write between 160 - 180 words using the suggested ideas in the list above

An English teenager is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay programme. Write between 160 - 180 words using the suggested ideas in the list above kgVjO
Yen Xa, Thanh Tri, Ha Noi, VietNam, September, 19, 2021 Dear Linda I’m very happy to know that you’ll be staying with my family for the next two months. Therefore, I want to share with you a little bit about my house. Overall, our house has 4 floors and consists of 4 bedrooms, 3 bathrooms and 1 kitchen. Additionally, we will provide you with a private bedroom and bathroom during the time you stay with us. However, there are several rules in my family that I think you must know. First, my family has a plethora of people due to the fact that my family is an extended family. Consequently, you will live with elderly and children. For the aforementioned reason the most important rule is that you must respect the people in my family who are older than you. Moreover, you mustn't give kids in my family money because they are easily swayed and pester you again to ask you for more money. Second, the materials of the floors in my house are made of wood. So if you accidentally drop something on the floor make sure you have the floor cleaned. Furthermore, after 10pm you mustn't create any noise or else someone in our neighborhood will complain to the street manager and we do not want that to happen. If you have any questions, please let me know. We will try our best to make you feel comfortable during your stay with us. I hope you will enjoy your time in VietNam. Looking forward to meeting you. Best wishes, Le Na
Yen
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Xa
, Thanh
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Tri
, Ha
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,
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VietNam
, September, 19, 2021

Dear Linda

I’m
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very
happy to know that you’ll be staying with my
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family
for the
next
two months.
Therefore
, I want to share with you a
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little bit
about my
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house
.
Overall
, our
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house
has 4
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floors
and consists of 4 bedrooms, 3 bathrooms and 1 kitchen.
Additionally
, we will provide you with a private bedroom and bathroom during the time you stay with us.

However
, there are several
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rules
in my
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family
that I
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think
you
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must
know.

First
, my
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family
has a plethora of
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people
due to the fact that my
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family
is an extended
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family
.
Consequently
, you will
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live
with elderly and children.

For the aforementioned reason the most
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important
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rule
is that you
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must
respect the
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people
in my
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family
who are older than you.
Moreover
, you mustn't give kids in my
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family
money
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because
they are
easily
swayed and pester you again to ask you for more money.

Second, the materials of the
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floors
in my
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house
are made
of wood.
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So if
you
accidentally
drop something on the
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floor
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make
sure you have the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
floor
cleaned.
Furthermore
, after 10pm you mustn't create any noise or else someone in our neighborhood will complain to the street
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manager and
we do not want that to happen.

If you have any questions,
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please
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let
me know.

We will try our best to
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make
you feel comfortable during your stay with us.

I hope you will enjoy your time in
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VietNam
.

Looking forward to meeting you.

Best wishes,

Le Na
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IELTS essay An English teenager is going to stay with your family for two months on a cultural homestay programme. Write between 160 - 180 words using the suggested ideas in the list above

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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