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An answer to a message of my friend about an au pair.

An answer to a message of my friend about an au pair. m2Ea8
Carl is one of my best friends. He is 19 years old. He could not enter a university this year becauce of the financial problems. So, I think he would love to have a job in the UK. His parents are retired. Carl has a sister and a little brother. he often babysits his brother, so he has an experience in that work. Carl is an independent, reliable and sociable boy. everything that a 19 year old boy needs. He is also very sensible. At first, he might seem a bit quiet but once he gets to know you he will be really talkative. I am sure you will never be bored with him. he is good with children because he is incredibly sympathetic. In his spare time he loves to play football. And I should admit that he is quite good in it. So I think he can teach some football tricks to Mike. The only problem with Carl is that he is a bit jealous. He seems a bit angry even when his friends talk to a stranger more than nessesary. Also, his english is quite bad, but I think he will improve very quickly. Anyway, he is a really good guy. I think you will love him.
Carl is one of my best friends. He is 19 years
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. He could not enter a university this year
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becauce
of the financial problems.
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, I
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to have a job in the UK. His parents
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. Carl has a sister and a
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brother.
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he
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often
babysits his brother,
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he has an experience in that work. Carl is an independent, reliable and sociable boy.
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everything
that a 19 year
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boy needs. He is
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sensible. At
first
, he might seem a bit quiet
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once he
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gets
to know you he will be
really
talkative. I am sure you will never
be bored
with him.
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he
is
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good
with children
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loves
to play football. And I should admit that he is quite
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in it.
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I
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he can teach
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some
football tricks to Mike. The
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problem with Carl is that he is a bit jealous. He seems a bit angry even when his friends talk to a stranger more than
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, his
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. Anyway, he is a
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IELTS essay An answer to a message of my friend about an au pair.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
210 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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