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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. YNjB
It is prevalently believed by some that in spite of possessing numerous news on the Internet, newspapers are seen as valuable source of abundant the very news for the most part. This notion seems highly insensible for me owing to its inconvenience and unaffordable feature of it. First of all, so-called published papers are much more preferable for some to a large extent. Inevitably, newspapers are considered as inconvenient tool in terms of carrying. Despite this, the majority of people are highly predisposed to read all the time even if it makes the challenging. In the most part of the western nations, for instance, in Japan or Germany the newspaper is becoming less common as well as consider this a thing of the past. This is because high pitched technological facilities like the Internet is significantly vital in obtaining or gaining any news related any fields of life on a large scale. In turn, newspaper tends to lose its value among the people. Second of all, when it comes to being aware of the world by means of existing news on the Internet, not everyone can afford to purchase in order to be a part of attendance in such a case. Admittedly, some newspapers are highly expensive on the account of its design along with its outline for the most part. For instance, New York Times in the UK is much more pervasive regardless of its high costs. On the behalf of purchasing it in a real time, it is highly recommended to utilize the Internet irrespective of distance together with more convenience. Above mentioned, underlying reasons for not being remain important tool any more will contribute the betterment and magnitude of the Internet. In conclusion, because of the fact that more advantages of the Internet are abundantly available for reading news and being available at ease, the newspaper will have a high tendency to lose its predominance in the long run.
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in spite of
possessing numerous
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news
on the Internet,
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newspapers
are
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seen
as valuable source of abundant the
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very
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news
for the most
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part
. This notion seems
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highly
insensible for me owing to its inconvenience and unaffordable feature of it.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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so
-called published papers are much more preferable for
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some
to a large extent.
Inevitably
,
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newspapers
are considered
as inconvenient tool in terms of carrying. Despite this, the majority of
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people
are
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highly
predisposed to read all the time even if it
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makes
the challenging. In the most
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part
of the western nations,
for instance
, in Japan or Germany the
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newspaper
is becoming less common
as well
as consider this a thing of the past. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
high pitched
technological facilities like the Internet is
significantly
vital in obtaining or gaining any
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news
related any fields of life on a large scale. In turn,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspaper
tends to lose its value among the
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people
.

Second of all, when it
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comes
to being aware of the world by means of existing
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news
on the Internet, not everyone can afford to
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purchase
in order to be a
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part
of attendance in such a case.
Admittedly
,
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some
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newspapers
are
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highly
expensive on the account of its design along with its outline for the most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
.
For instance
,
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New
York Times in the UK is much more pervasive regardless of its high costs. On the behalf of purchasing it in a real time, it is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
highly
The verb 'recommended' is used with the gerund form: "recommended utilizing".
recommended to utilize
the Internet irrespective of distance together with more convenience. Above mentioned, underlying reasons for not being
Consider using a past participle here: "remained".
remain
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important
tool
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
will contribute the betterment and magnitude of the Internet.

In conclusion
,
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because of the fact that
more advantages of the Internet are
abundantly
available for reading
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news
and being available at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
, the
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newspaper
will have a high tendency to lose its predominance in the long run.
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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