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Although many countries are becoming richer, these societies still have members who are poor and struggle each day to survive. Why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer citizens?

Although many countries are becoming richer, these societies still have members who are poor and struggle each day to survive. Why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer citizens? GlBxQ
It is obvious that recent years have witnessed the booming of poor population on a global scale. As a result, while numerous countries are coming to be more prosperous, their residents are still porvety-stricken and find it hard to live every single day. This essay aims to indicate some causes of and solutions to this trend. There are two main reasons for this problem. First, the gap between rich and poor can be strongly linked with this situation. In fact, people who have low living standard tend to work extremely hard for their life, so they might be an easy prey for those who have deep pockets to take advantage of. Thus, incomes of many workers do not deserve their efforts and can not afford their demand for living. Second, the global economic crisis might be responsible for this problem. In addition, it increases inflation rate, so the price of goods, housing, and healthcare insurance outpace of the financial resources of many inhabitants. For example, expensive food and products has impoverished those who have average income in American Some possible solutions have been given to take care of this issue. The most common way is financial aids. Local government can support people who have difficult circumstances by providing them employment opportunities which's employee are paid equally. Children of poor families can be encouraged to be educated well by scholarship of several schools. For instance, Harvard university have supplied chances for students who don’t have enough money to get free study programs. In conclusion, this issue is not the new but it is always a trouble of every policy maker all over the world. We not only expect actions from government or international organizations, but also support poorer citizens to help them have a better life.
It is obvious that recent years have witnessed the booming of poor population on a global scale.
As a result
, while numerous countries are coming to be more prosperous, their residents are
still
porvety-stricken
and find it
hard
to
live
every single day. This essay aims to indicate
some
causes of and solutions to this trend.

There are two main reasons for this problem.
First
, the gap between rich and poor can be
strongly
linked with this situation. In fact,
people
who
have low living standard tend to work
extremely
hard
for their life,
so
they might be an easy prey for those
who
have deep pockets to take advantage of.
Thus
, incomes of
many
workers do not deserve their efforts and can not afford their demand for living. Second, the global economic crisis might be responsible for this problem.
In addition
, it increases inflation rate,
so
the price of
goods
, housing, and healthcare insurance outpace of the financial resources of
many
inhabitants.
For example
, expensive food and products has impoverished those
who
have average income in
American


Some
possible solutions have been
given
to take care of this issue. The most common way is financial aids. Local
government
can support
people
who
have difficult circumstances by providing them employment opportunities which's employee
are paid
equally
. Children of poor families can
be encouraged
to
be educated
well by scholarship of several schools.
For instance
,
Harvard university
have supplied chances for students
who
don’t have
enough
money to
get
free study programs.

In conclusion
, this issue is not the new
but
it is always a trouble of every
policy maker
all over the world. We not
only
expect
actions from
government
or international organizations,
but
also
support poorer citizens to
help
them have a better life.
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IELTS essay Although many countries are becoming richer, these societies still have members who are poor and struggle each day to survive. Why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer citizens?

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295 words
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