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All around the world more people are becoming homeless in major cities.

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All around the world more people are becoming homeless in major cities. This essay is going to look at what causes this problem and possible solutions. The cost of living in a major city is more expensive than small towns and the increase is becoming a trend. For example, longer distances lead to higher prices for fuel or city transport, the rent is enormous, and the taxes are impossible. But hospital’s fee and the subsequent credits are what leads people to lose their homes. For example one visit to the hospital for a small injury can leave someone in thousands dollar debt. Some people may argue that these costs are normal and cannot lead to homelessness but it is my opinion that the average person's salary can't cover such emergency costs and that can easily ruin their lives. Even though the main cause is not easily solvable, there are still measure that can be taken to help humans who live on the street. One possible solution is transforming abandoned buildings into shelters so that people can have a roof above their heads and walls that stop the wind. Another thing that can be added is running water, canned food and blankets. While it may seem wasteful and impossible and society will not agree, I believe that it will not hurt developed countries’ budgetand the issue and the idea for the shelters can be made into charities. After all animal shelters exist for the homeless cats and dogs. To sum up, a rising part of the population cannot afford to live in the biggest cities, which leads to them losing the roof atop their heads. Despite that there are measures that can be taken, one of which is making human shelters. It is my opinion that we need to stand up and raise awareness.
All around the world more
people
are becoming homeless in major
cities
. This essay is going to look at what causes this problem and possible solutions.

The cost of living in a major city is more expensive than
small
towns and the increase is becoming a trend.
For example
, longer distances
lead
to higher prices for fuel or city transport, the rent is enormous, and the taxes are impossible.
But
hospital’s fee and the subsequent credits are what leads
people
to lose their homes.
For example
one visit to the hospital for a
small
injury can
leave
someone in thousands dollar debt.
Some
people
may argue that these costs are normal and cannot
lead
to homelessness
but
it is my opinion that the average person's salary can't cover such emergency costs and that can
easily
ruin their
lives
.

Even though
the main cause is not
easily
solvable, there are
still
measure that can
be taken
to
help
humans who
live
on the street. One possible solution is transforming abandoned buildings into
shelters
so
that
people
can have a roof above their heads and walls that
stop
the wind. Another thing that can be
added
is running water, canned food and blankets. While it may seem wasteful and impossible and society will not
agree
, I believe that it will not hurt
developed countries
budgetand
the issue and the
idea
for the
shelters
can
be made
into charities.
After all
animal
shelters
exist for the homeless cats and dogs.

To sum up, a rising part of the population cannot afford to
live
in the biggest
cities
, which leads to them losing the roof atop their heads. Despite that there are measures that can
be taken
, one of which is making human
shelters
. It is my opinion that we need to stand up and raise awareness.
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IELTS essay All around the world more people are becoming homeless in major cities.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6.0
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