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Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience.

Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience. gj7A
Nowadays, majority of individuals are preferring air travel because of its convenience and cheaper costs. They are both merits and demerits associated with it. This essay will explicate benefits of traveling through air like opportunity to experience different countries, and its detrimental impact such as increase in environmental pollution. To embark on, decrease in the prices of airline tickets, has aided ordinary man to explore other nations. Previously because of the exorbitant prices of the air tickets, travelling overseas was constricted to affluent individuals, while making it a luxury for common individuals. However, with the availability of options such as low budget airlines, mass travelling, and discounted prices, it is now in the reach of every individual regardless of their background to visit different countries. For instance, Air India survey has recorded an increase of 10 percent in the past decade, and attribute it to alleviated pricing of seats. Thus, making reduction in cost of air travel as positive aspect. Despite the advantage discussed above, they are some downside to the above phenomena like contribution to pollutant in the airs. The radical growth of flights has filled the atmosphere with myriad chemicals leading to its contamination. Furthermore, such air contents can lead to release of greenhouse gases, damaging the environment. To illustrate, Cambridge Research University has made perspicuous that air industry impart 40% of air pollutants throughout the world, which is a major issue to be addressed. Hence, increase in airplanes frequencies in the air causes severe damage to our surroundings. Thus, to recapitulate, the benefits of air pricing overshadows its drawback. Every individuals is now provided a chance to experience various nations and travel across the world because of it. The environmental issue is a serious issue to be considered but it is ought to happen regardless of the airline costs.
Nowadays,
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majority of
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individuals
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are preferring
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air
travel
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because
of its convenience and cheaper costs. They are both merits and demerits associated with it. This essay will explicate benefits of traveling through
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air
like opportunity to experience
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different
countries, and its detrimental impact such as increase in environmental pollution.

To embark on, decrease in the prices of airline tickets, has aided ordinary
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man
to explore other nations. Previously
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because
of the exorbitant prices of the
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air
tickets, travelling overseas
was constricted
to affluent
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individuals
, while making it a luxury for common
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individuals
.
However
, with the availability of options such as low budget airlines, mass travelling, and discounted prices, it is
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now
in the reach of every
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individual
regardless of their background to visit
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different
countries.
For instance
,
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Air
India survey has recorded an increase of 10 percent in the past decade, and attribute it to alleviated pricing of seats.
Thus
, making reduction in cost of
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air
travel as
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positive
aspect.

Despite the advantage discussed above, they are
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some
downside to the above phenomena like contribution to pollutant in the airs. The radical growth of flights has filled the atmosphere with myriad chemicals leading to its contamination.
Furthermore
, such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
contents can lead to release of greenhouse gases, damaging the environment. To illustrate, Cambridge Research University has made perspicuous that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
industry impart 40% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
air
pollutants throughout the world, which is a major issue to
be addressed
.
Hence
, increase in airplanes frequencies in the
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air
causes severe damage to our surroundings.

Thus
, to recapitulate, the benefits of
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air
pricing overshadows its drawback.
'Each', 'every', 'either' and 'neither' are used with singular. Did you mean "all"?
Every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "individual"?
individuals
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is
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now
provided a chance to experience various nations and travel across the world
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because
of it. The environmental issue is a serious issue to
be considered
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but
it is ought to happen regardless of the airline costs.
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IELTS essay Airline Companies in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. Discuss whether this is positive or negative developments. Give some examples based on your own experience.

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