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Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. OMqLy
It is discussed that the air ticket's price should be increased, because air transport polute the environment. I do not support the opinion due to the fact that not only will it make traveling abroad unaffordable for people with low income but it will also lead to increase of use land and water transport that are also harmfully influence on the nature. First of all, use planes provide an opportunity for people around the world to get they need quickly and for the price which is a way lower than by othertypes of transport. So growth of the ticket price will make it impossible for some to traven long distances. Not only will it make those people feel unhappy but it will also decrease incom of majority travel agencies turning some of them into bankrupts. As a concequence it will increase unemployment that will be harmfull for the economy. Secondly, if the expences for traveling by land of sea transport become cheaper due to growth of air tickets price, it will lead that more travelers start ships or buses instead of planes. So, decrease of pollution from air transport will be compensated by land and sea transport. As a consequence the only result of such law will be the raise of travel time. The better solution here would be support of eco-friendly technologies development. That can help to reduce emissions from air thansport in the long run. The key to success here if goverment start provide some privelegies for factorers that integrate green tecnologies into the wehicles they produce. In conclusion, the growth of price for air tickets can not solve the problem of pollution the environment. To cope with it it is necessary to support the development of eco-friendly techonologies.
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polute
the environment. I do not support the opinion due to the fact that not
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traveling abroad unaffordable for
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people
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land and water
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harmfully
influence on

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the
nature.

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use
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planes
provide an opportunity for
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people
around the world to
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get
they need
quickly
and for the
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price
which is a way lower than by
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othertypes
of

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transport
.
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growth of the ticket
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price
will
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make
it impossible for
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traven
long distances. Not
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incom
of majority travel agencies turning
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concequence
it will increase unemployment that will be
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harmfull
for the economy.

Secondly
, if the
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expences
for traveling by land of sea
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transport
become cheaper due to growth of
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air
tickets
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price
, it will lead that more travelers
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start
ships or buses
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of
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planes
.
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, decrease of pollution from
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transport
will
be compensated
by land and sea
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transport
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a consequence the
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result of such law will be the raise of
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travel


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time
. The better solution here would be support of eco-friendly
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technologies
development. That can
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help
to
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reduce
emissions from
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air
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thansport
in the long run. The key to success

here if
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goverment
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start
provide
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some
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privelegies
for
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factorers
that integrate green
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tecnologies
into the
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wehicles
they produce.

In conclusion
, the growth of
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price
for
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air
tickets can not solve the problem of pollution the environment. To cope with
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it it
is necessary to support the development of
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eco-friendly


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techonologies
.
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IELTS essay Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic.

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