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Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. Ordinary people can get no advantages with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. Ordinary people can get no advantages with the development of air travel. pO2d
I disagree with the statement that air travel has advantages only for the wealthiest people and there are no benefits for the vast majority of the middle and lower class people. I shall put forth my arguments to support my views in the following essay.  There is no doubt that a few years ago, air travel was the only for the upper strator of society. However, nowadays, most of the airline companies are offering economy class tickets which are affordable by the common man. On the top of that, they have a scheme by which if one buys ticket well in advance than the cost of ticket is even lower. So, the given statement is not justified in today's scenario. If we go with the notion that only the rich can travel by air, then also the ordinary man is benefited in various ways. When rich tourists come to visit a place, they spend a lot of in hotels, tourist places and also in the shopping centres from where they buy souvenirs. Many people are employed in the tourism industry. Even if they can't travel themselves, their sources of income is directly or indirectly dependent on these tourist who travel by air. For example, in India, during the tourist season many guides, rickshaw wallas and taxi drivers earn enough to last them a whole year. Moreover, it is a well-known fact that, as tourist come, the governments spend on infrastructure such as stadiums roads and hotels. All these are used by the common man. Finally, the common man gets opportunity for culture exchange even without himself travelling by air. When other people come he learns about their culture and gives them the good points of his culture. In conclusion, air travel benefits all people and not just the most affluent.
I disagree with the statement that
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travel
has advantages
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only
for the wealthiest
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people
and there are no benefits for the vast majority of the middle and lower
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class
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people
. I shall put forth my arguments to support my views in the following essay.  There is no doubt that a few years ago,
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air
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travel
was the
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only
for the upper
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strator
of society.
However
, nowadays, most of the airline
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companies
are offering economy
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class
tickets which are affordable by the common
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man
. On the top of that, they have a scheme by which
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if
one
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buys
ticket well in advance than the cost of ticket is even lower.
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, the
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given
statement is not justified in
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today
's scenario. If we
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go with
the notion that
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only
the rich can
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travel
by
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air
, then
also
the ordinary
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man
is benefited
in various ways. When rich
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tourists
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come
to visit a place, they spend
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a lot of
in hotels,
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tourist
places and
also
in the shopping
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centres
from where they
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buy
souvenirs.
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Many
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people
are employed
in the tourism industry. Even if they can't
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travel
themselves, their sources of income is
directly
or
indirectly
dependent on these
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tourist
who
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travel
by
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air
.
For example
, in India, during the
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tourist
season
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many
guides, rickshaw
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wallas
and taxi drivers earn
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enough
to last them a whole year.
Moreover
,
it is a well-known fact that
, as
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tourist
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come
, the
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governments
spend on infrastructure such as stadiums roads and hotels. All these are
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used
by the common
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man
.
Finally
, the common
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man
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gets
opportunity for culture exchange even without himself travelling by
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air
. When other
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people
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come
he learns about their culture and gives them the
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good
points of his culture.
In conclusion
,
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benefits all
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people
and not
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just
the most affluent.
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IELTS essay Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. Ordinary people can get no advantages with the development of air travel.

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