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: agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.

: agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. 850A5
The way we behave is very important. Our behaviour can influences people around us and has strong effect in our relationship. Some people may disagree with that different clothes influence the way people behave but others agree with this. In my view people behave differently when they wear different clothes for two reasons. The main reason is that the clothes we wear have effect in our self-confidence. People usually judge you through your clothes and this bias cause them to behave differently. If you wear proper clothes, they behave you friendly. Other wise, they think biasly about you and dont tend to interact you. For example, Tim said when he was poor, he lived in slut. He didn't have enough money for buying clothes. They had problem in supplying the nessesory things of life such as food, water. He stated that always people ignore them and behave them in a inapropprate way. He studied hard to become a doctor. Now he has a god life and his way of wearing change. he said that people behave him much more better than before. As you can see, people wouldn't have behave him well if he weren't wear good clothes. Another reason is that some jobs have uniform and expect you to behave in a proper way for your job. Although you will be a funny person in your personal life but if you are a police officer and wear his uniform that needs you to be a little serious and have discipline. For instance, my older brother is a police officer. He is so funny and always makes us to laugh. His room was usually messy and he didn't care a lot about discipline. When he decided to become a police officer he started to go training class for it. Gradually he changed and learned how serious he should be. One day i went to his work to visited him. He really treated me in a different way of home. After he came back home I surprisingly asked him about his different behaviour. He explains me that when he wears his uniform he should behave in serious way that delinquents did not do crime. This taught me that when you wear special clothes of some jobs, you should behave proper for that job. In sum, though some may oppose the claim, I agree that people behave different in different clothes. That can be because of your self-confidence or the obligation that a job wants you special way of behavior. Every person should attend to his clothes because it is the way you introduce your self.
The way we
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. Our
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can
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influences
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people
around us and has strong effect in our relationship.
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people
may disagree with that
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clothes
influence the way
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others
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agree
with this. In my view
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people
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differently
when they
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wear
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different
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clothes
for two reasons.

The main reason is that the
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clothes
we
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wear
have effect in our self-confidence.
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People
usually
judge you through your
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clothes
and this bias cause them to
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behave
differently
. If you
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wear
proper
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clothes
, they
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behave
you friendly.
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, they
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think
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biasly
about you and
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dont
tend to interact you.
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lived
in slut. He didn't have
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enough
money for buying
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clothes
. They had problem in supplying the
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nessesory
things of life such as food, water. He stated that always
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people
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ignore
them and
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behave
them in
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inapropprate
way. He studied
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hard
to become a doctor.
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Now
he has a god life and his way of wearing
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change
.
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he
said that
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people
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behave
him much
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than
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. As you can
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,
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people
wouldn't have
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behave
him well if he weren't
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wear
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good
clothes.

Another reason is that
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some
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jobs
have uniform and
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you to
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behave
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in a proper way
for your
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job
. Although you will be a
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funny
person in your personal life
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but
if you are a police officer and
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wear
his uniform that needs you to be a
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serious and have discipline.
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so
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funny
and always
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makes
us to laugh. His room was
usually
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messy and
he didn't care a lot about discipline. When he decided to become a police officer he
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started
to go training
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class
for it.
Gradually
he
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changed
and learned how serious he should be. One day
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i
went to his work to visited him. He
really
treated me in a
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way of home.
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After
he came back home I
surprisingly
asked him about his
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behaviour
. He
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explains
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me
that when he
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wears
his uniform he should
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in serious way that delinquents did not do crime. This taught me that when you
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wear
special
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clothes
of
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jobs
, you should
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proper for that job.

In sum, though
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some
may oppose the claim, I
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that
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people
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different
in
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clothes
. That can be
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because
of your self-confidence or the obligation that a
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job
wants you special way of behavior. Every person should attend to his
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clothes
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because
it is the way you introduce your self.
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IELTS essay : agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
434 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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