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agree or disagree on paying taxes

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Without a shadow of a doubt, I advocate the idea of enforcing taxes payment, nowadays no one can deny the fact that we need more hospitals and schools which are costly to be established. Thus, it was crucial for the government to enforce taxes payment based on the citizens annual's income. There are an enormous number of reasons explained why individuals are obligated to pay taxes. First of all, assuming that the majority have stopped paying taxes. Therefore, there will be plenty of devastating impacts on the nation's economy, due to the fact that the collected taxes are generally used in building public schools, hospitals, clinics and roads. Moreover, without taxes we will suffer from the criminals whose are roaming in the streets as the government won't be able to establish enough police stations in every city. On top of that, they won't have the enough equipment to catch criminals easily. Furthermore, not only the state won't be able to provide the appropriate serves that people deserves but also won't be to provide a protection for individuals especially in the countryside along with the sharply fall in the quality of education, and there would be insufficient number of public schools. More than that, Taxes contributes in providing an acceptable life for the impoverished people who by and large lives in slums and dangerous areas that are full of criminals, outlaws, drug-sellers. In other words, if you refuse to pay taxes you won't only hurt the economy of the country but also the poor people. Eventually, the poor will organize a revolutions which can damage the society and cause conflicts and destructive endless wars between citizens. In conclusion, I highly insists paying taxes because of the reasons I have mentioned above, For instance, If we all stopped paying taxes, the merely people who are going to suffer are the poor one. In fact, the majority believes that their taxes are collected by corrupted individuals. However, I am still sticking to my first opinion and I believe that we will only suffer inevitably if we stopped paying the amount of taxes needed by the country, it is our moral duty of pay taxes.
Without a shadow of a doubt, I advocate the
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idea
of enforcing
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taxes
payment, nowadays no one can deny the fact that we need more hospitals and schools which are costly to
be established
.
Thus
, it was crucial for the
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government
to enforce
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taxes
payment based on the citizens annual's income.

There are an enormous number of reasons
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explained
why individuals
are obligated
to pay
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taxes
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, assuming that the majority have
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stopped
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paying
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taxes
.
Therefore
, there will be
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plenty
of devastating impacts on the nation's economy, due to the fact that the collected
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taxes
are
generally
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used
in building public schools, hospitals, clinics and roads.
Moreover
, without
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taxes
we will suffer from the criminals whose are roaming in the streets as the
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government
won't be able to establish
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enough
police stations in every city.
On top of that
, they won't have the
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enough
equipment to catch criminals
easily
.
Furthermore
, not
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only
the state won't be able to provide the appropriate serves that
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
deserves
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but
also
won't be to provide a protection for individuals
especially
in the countryside along with the
sharply
fall in the quality of education, and there would be insufficient number of public schools.

More than that,
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Taxes
contributes in providing an acceptable life for the impoverished
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people
who by and large
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lives
in slums and
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dangerous
areas that are full of criminals, outlaws, drug-sellers.
In other words
, if you refuse to pay
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taxes
you won't
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only
hurt the economy of the country
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but
also
the poor
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people
.
Eventually
, the poor will organize
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a revolution" or simply "revolutions"?
a revolutions
which can damage the society and cause conflicts and destructive endless wars between citizens.

In conclusion
, I
highly
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insists
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paying
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taxes
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because
of the reasons I have mentioned above,
For instance
, If we all
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stopped
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paying
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taxes
, the
merely
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people
who are going to suffer are the poor one. In fact, the majority believes that their
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taxes
are collected
by corrupted individuals.
However
, I am
still
sticking to my
first
opinion and I believe that we will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
suffer
inevitably
if we
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stopped
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paying
the amount of
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taxes
needed by the country, it is our moral duty of pay
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taxes
.
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IELTS essay agree or disagree on paying taxes

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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