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After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year. NDR2
A part of individuals belive that after finishing school students should take a gap year and trael through the foriegn countries, while some argue that students need spend on working their gap year between high school and starting university. However, I amquite convinced last point view. Irrespective of travelling to foriegn country useful for student's broden horizon. On the other hand working during the gap year help of this, they can gain numerous practical exposure. To begin with, there are certain seasons which justify the importance of working during the gap year. It is no exaggeration to say that working can sometimes be monotonous, thereforeworking can make learning creative fun-filled and more effective a fresh mindset. Working in the local commercial ventures of communal premises would be great interest and can provide learning experiences that can nat be forgotten fast. We can say beyond any doubt yhat many educational reformers today incline towards working earliy specialisation serves as a basis of life lessons. It is widely believed that tons of students always prefer spend travelling on their gap year. As coin has two sides, on the flip of side travelling through foriegn country will bring numerous adventages to the students. On top of this, travelling a great chance to broaden student's mind. For instanse, they can make new friends with other students coming from othercountries, exchange languages and learn about different cultures. Travelling helps to avoid a verge of dilapidation mind. From this contex it can easilybe inferred that both points of view ha their own disputes. I completely agree with working during the gap year, it is freely provides innovative learning experiences. Without any doubt practical exposure by working undeniably it affects some paraments of students' life experiencies.
A part of individuals
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belive
that after finishing school
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students
should take a
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gap
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year
and
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trael
through the
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foriegn
countries, while
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some
argue that
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students
need spend on
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working
their
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gap
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year
between high school and starting university.
However
, I
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amquite
convinced last point view. Irrespective of
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travelling
to
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foriegn
country useful for student's
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broden
horizon.
On the other hand
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working
during the
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gap
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year
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help
of this, they can gain numerous practical exposure. To
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begin
with, there are certain seasons which justify the importance of
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working
during the
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gap
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year
. It is no exaggeration to say that
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working
can
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sometimes
be monotonous,
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thereforeworking
can
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make
learning creative fun-filled and more effective a fresh mindset.
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Working
in the local commercial ventures of communal premises would be great interest and can provide learning experiences that can
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nat
be forgotten
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fast
. We can say beyond any doubt
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yhat
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many
educational reformers
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today
incline towards
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working
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earliy
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specialisation
serves as a basis of life lessons. It is
widely
believed that tons of
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students
always prefer spend
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travelling
on their
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gap
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year
. As coin has two sides, on the flip of side
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travelling
through
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foriegn
country will bring numerous
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adventages
to the
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students
. On top of this,
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travelling
a great chance to broaden student's mind. For
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instanse
, they can
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make
new friends with other
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students
coming from
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othercountries
, exchange languages and learn about
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different
cultures.
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Travelling
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helps
to avoid a verge of dilapidation mind. From this
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contex
it can
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easilybe
inferred that both points of view ha their
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own
disputes. I completely
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agree
with
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working
during the
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gap
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year
, it is
freely
provides innovative learning experiences. Without any doubt practical exposure by
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working
undeniably
it affects
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some
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paraments
of students' life
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experiencies
.
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IELTS essay After graduation many students take a year to travel. Some think that it would be more useful to work for a year.

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