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After doing a presentation, you want to identify your weaknesses and improve your skills. Which of the following ways do you think is better? 1. Review your recording alone2. Let classmates or colleagues give suggestions and discuss about them. v.2

After doing a presentation, you want to identify your weaknesses and improve your skills. Which of the following ways do you think is better? 1. Review your recording alone2. Let classmates or colleagues give suggestions and discuss about them. v. 2
There are certain different ways to improve the performance after doing a presentation. Some people claim that it is efficient to review recordings alone to find problems during the presentation. However, I could hardly agree more with the statement that it could be more helpful for presenters that allowing others to offer their suggestions and discuss about given advice together. The fundamental and deeper discussions are illustrated as follows. Discussing suggestions for presenting and figuring out the best solutions to problems with others could make people more motivated. For one thing, watching recordings alone could be a boring thing and people might easily get distracted by other irrelevant things. Instead, it is more efficient to discuss with others and listen to their advice since it can supervise people to focus on this certain issue. For another, it is much easier to insist reviewing performance with the companion of others since people could not only point out our weaknesses, but also affirm our advantages. By contrast, if we review recordings on my own, we might feel disappointed since we find various disadvantages of our presentation. Therefore, it is better to listen to suggestions from others and discuss them for the improvement of presentation since it is high efficiency. Additionally, others' opinions are generally more objectives since different people have different thoughts and perspectives. It is more easily for other listens to find limits in our delivery. When we review our own records, it is common that we neglect some weaknesses or we fail to define certain problems. Others could help us by pointing out this kind of problems and help us improve our skills. For instance, people might not regard some misunderstanding expressions as problems when they talk because they believe that they explain everything clearly and all the audience should understand what they are talking about. However, it could be hard to understand for others since everyone has own modes of thinking, they might consider your explanation for a certain definition is not logical which causes difficulty in understanding of your topic. Then some specific suggestions can be given and the presenter and listeners could discuss together which is the best way to improve the performance. To sum up, we may safely conclude that discussing with others is a comparatively better way to identify problems and enhance skills after presentations. This is because it can help motivate people to review problems and more objects suggestions could be proposed.
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claim that it is efficient to
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recordings alone to find
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problems
during the
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presentation
.
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agree
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and
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advice together. The fundamental and deeper discussions
are illustrated
as follows.

Discussing
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suggestions
for presenting and figuring out the best solutions to
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problems
with others could
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make
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people
more motivated. For one thing, watching recordings alone could be a boring thing and
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people
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easily
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distracted by
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other
irrelevant things.
Instead
, it is more efficient to
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discuss
with others and listen to their advice since it can supervise
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people
to focus on this
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certain
issue. For another, it is much easier to insist reviewing performance with the companion of others since
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people
could not
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point out our weaknesses,
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also
affirm our advantages. By contrast, if we
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review
recordings on my
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own
, we
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might
feel disappointed since we find various disadvantages of our
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presentation
.
Therefore
, it is better to listen to
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suggestions
from others and
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discuss
them for the improvement of
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presentation
since it is high efficiency.

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generally
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thoughts and perspectives. It is more
easily
for
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listens to find limits in our delivery. When we
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our
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records, it is common that we neglect
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weaknesses or
we fail to define
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problems
. Others could
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help
us by pointing out this kind of
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and
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us
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our
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not regard
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misunderstanding expressions as
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when they talk
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they believe that they
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explain
everything
clearly
and all the audience should understand what they are talking about.
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, it could be
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hard
to understand for others since everyone has
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own
modes of thinking, they
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consider your explanation for a
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definition is not logical which causes difficulty in understanding of your topic. Then
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some
specific
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suggestions
can be
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given
and the presenter and listeners could
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discuss
together which is the best way to
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improve
the performance.

To sum up, we may
safely
conclude that discussing with others is a
comparatively
better way to identify
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problems
and enhance
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skills
after
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presentations
. This is
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because
it can
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help
motivate
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people
to
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review
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problems
and more objects
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suggestions
could
be proposed
.
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43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay After doing a presentation, you want to identify your weaknesses and improve your skills. Which of the following ways do you think is better? 1. Review your recording alone2. Let classmates or colleagues give suggestions and discuss about them. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
408 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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