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Affects of technology on human relations

Affects of technology on human relations VBgaQ
Because of technology interaction among many people has modified in recent times. Robotics affected close relations in many ways like if we take example from day to day life, family members do not spend quality time with each other as they previously spent with each other. Most of the time they could be seen playing with their gadgets. Its effecting mental and physical health of people. Few years back, when there was rare advancement of technology they used to spend time with each other and expressed their emotions freely until mobile phones and computers suddenly changed the entire phenomenon of day to day life. Close relatives had ample time to spend with all family relations. Similarly, bond of friendship had much stronger. It impacted our lives in a negative ways and it could be seen clearly. Sitting in front of computer or mobile phones has really harsh consequences. It is not only cutting close knitted families but also physical impact in the sense like eye sight gets weak and poor body posture becoming a serious illness. One aspect of technology is social media and sometimes it shows totally different personality of the person which is based on lies and it would not associate with reality. It would bring feeling of deprivation and impact the people in longer run.
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Because
of technology interaction among
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many
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people
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has
modified in recent
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times
. Robotics
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affected
close relations in
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many
ways like if we take example from day to day life, family members do not spend quality
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time
with each other as they previously spent with each other. Most of the
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time
they could be
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seen
playing with their gadgets.
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effecting mental and physical health of
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people
. Few years back, when there was rare advancement of technology they
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used
to spend
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time
with each other and expressed their emotions
freely
until mobile phones and computers
suddenly
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changed
the entire phenomenon of day to day life. Close relatives had ample
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time
to spend with all family relations.
Similarly
, bond of friendship had much stronger. It impacted our
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lives
in a
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negative
ways and it could be
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seen
clearly
. Sitting in front of computer or mobile phones has
really
harsh consequences. It is not
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only
cutting close knitted families
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but
also
physical impact in the sense like
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eye sight
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gets
weak and poor body posture becoming a serious illness. One aspect of technology is social media and
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sometimes
it
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shows
totally
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different
personality of the person which
is based
on lies and it would not associate with reality. It would bring feeling of deprivation and impact the
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people
in longer run.
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IELTS essay Affects of technology on human relations

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
218 words
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