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Adverts these days give more importance to explain their product is new than other. Wht are the reasons of it? Is it positive or negative trend?

Adverts these days give more importance to explain their product is new than other. Wht are the reasons of it? Is it positive or negative trend? aAWn7
Since the 21st century is commenced, ads have become the backbone of business. In this modern era organisations use advertisements to instill the factors in public's mind that their products have new features and our water as compared to others. This essay will explicate the causes such as rising sale and competition behind this approach along with the factors to discuss how this development affects the public in a negative way. To begin with, to increase the market of things is the predominant reason that is why corporations advertise their objects in this way. To put it briefly, when a new product is launched in markets people do not have knowledge about that. Ergo, companies take help of advertisers to attract more and more customers towards it. For example, headline of 'The Moscow Times' revealed that since the companies have started to use commercial as sales of advertised stocks have increased by 65%. As a result, organisations get massive benefits by advertising their outputs. Moreover, there is huge competition in market and a particular business want to defeat another one. Therefore, product owner emphasizes the new features of their gadgets in order to defeat their competitors. Moving further, I believe that this method of commercializing has some far-tech repercussions. The salient one is that many consumers seem to have wrongly persuaded to buy the products. In other words, companies overestimate their products during advertising because they want to have more purchaser. But, in reality they do not meet the expectations of the buyers. For instance, a survey was conducted by the trade department has demonstrated that 55% of as these days provide false information regarding a particular brand. Consequently, people do not get value for their money as well as its spoils the image of brand among public. To recapitulate, although ads provides the short-term advantages to the brand owners, yet in reality fake adverts have no any long-term benefit for both buyers and sellers. Nevertheless, advertisements can stress on novelty provided tht the facts should be accurate.
Since the 21st century
is commenced
, ads have become the backbone of business. In this modern era
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organisations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
advertisements to instill the factors in public's mind that their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
have new features and our water as compared to others. This essay will explicate the causes such as rising sale and competition behind this approach along with the factors to discuss how this development affects the public in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
way.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, to increase the market of things is the predominant reason
that is
why corporations advertise their objects in this way. To put it
briefly
, when a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
is launched
in markets
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not have knowledge about that. Ergo,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
take
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of advertisers to attract more and more customers towards it.
For example
, headline of 'The Moscow Times' revealed that since the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
commercial as sales of advertised stocks have increased by 65%.
As a result
,
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organisations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
massive benefits by advertising their outputs.
Moreover
, there is huge competition in market and a particular business want to defeat another one.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
owner emphasizes the new features of their gadgets in order to defeat their competitors.

Moving
further
, I believe that this method of commercializing has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
far-tech repercussions. The salient one is that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
consumers seem to have
wrongly
persuaded to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
In other words
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
overestimate their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
during advertising
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they want to have more purchaser.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
, in reality they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the expectations of the buyers.
For instance
, a survey
was conducted
by the trade department has demonstrated that 55% of as these days provide false information regarding a particular brand.
Consequently
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
value for their money
as well
as its spoils the image of brand among public.

To recapitulate, although ads provides the short-term advantages to the brand owners,
yet
in reality fake adverts have
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any long-term benefit for both buyers and sellers.
Nevertheless
, advertisements can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
on novelty provided
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tht
the facts should be accurate.
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IELTS essay Adverts these days give more importance to explain their product is new than other. Wht are the reasons of it? Is it positive or negative trend?

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4 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
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