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Advertising is all around us; it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

Undoubtedly, advertisements play crucial role for marketing products as well as they are the main tool between a particular business and Target the audiences. Certain people believe that advertising has a beneficial result on individuals and business, whereas others deem that it has also adverse impact on people lives. This essay shall delve both the consequences previously giving opinion in upcoming fragments. To commence with, in these days we see advertisements on television, through posters. There are abundance of pros of advertisements. First and the foremost merit is that advertisements give the job opportunities to people, they get chance to earn money in their life. Secondly, individuals get to know about more products which shows via advertisements. They also get chance to try new things as well. For example, a Kelling cornflakes have more flavors and people try it. Hence, marketing provides the source of income to people. However, there are a number of demerits of advertisements. Primarily, One major problem is that advertisers often aim their marketing at the young age groups. It influences to individuals to buy more products, children are more encouraging their parents to buy gizmos for them. Furthermore, parents have more pressure due to the fact of their children manipulate them to buy things, and they buy those gadgets which are not beneficial for them. For example, a recent survey conducted by USA University 79% kids influenced by advertisements on television. In addition, Capturing the mind of people is main target of the advertisements, it is a way of wastage of money to take things by watching advertisements. In abridgment, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although advertisements plays essential role to give more information to the people yet it also gives job opportunities to masses.
Undoubtedly
,
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advertisements
play crucial role for marketing products
as well
as they are the main tool between a particular business and Target the audiences. Certain
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people
believe that advertising has a beneficial result on individuals and business, whereas others deem that it has
also
adverse impact on
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people
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lives
. This essay shall delve both the consequences previously giving opinion in upcoming fragments. To commence with, in these days we
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see
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advertisements
on television, through posters. There are abundance of pros of
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advertisements
.
First
and the foremost merit is that
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advertisements
give the job opportunities to
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people
, they
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get
chance to earn money in their life.
Secondly
, individuals
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get
to know about more products which
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shows
via
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advertisements
. They
also
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get
chance to try new things
as well
.
For example
, a
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Kelling
cornflakes have more flavors and
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people
try it.
Hence
, marketing provides the source of income to
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people
.
However
, there are a number of demerits of
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advertisements
.
Primarily
, One major problem is that advertisers
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often
aim their marketing at the young age groups. It influences to individuals to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
more products, children are more encouraging their parents to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
gizmos for them.
Furthermore
, parents have more pressure due to the fact of their children manipulate them to
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buy
things, and they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
those gadgets which are not beneficial for them.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by USA University 79% kids influenced by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
on television.
In addition
, Capturing the mind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
is main target of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
, it is a way of wastage of money to take things by watching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
. In abridgment, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
plays essential role to give more information to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
yet
it
also
gives job opportunities to masses.
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IELTS essay Advertising is all around us; it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
294 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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