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Advertisement is really in success

Advertisement is really in success 9L320
I think advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. We can find advertisements on the Internet, on TV, in town and so on. Advertisements on the Internet usually use our information like fashion so they are more fascinating for us. Also, it is impossible for us to avoid them. We are able to see them on almost of all site. In addition, commercial advertisement on TV is also arranged very well. If you watch a TV program late at night, you are able to recognize a lot of advertisements about snacks and sweets. They broadcast them on purpose because people often feel hungry at that time.
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Advertisements
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our information like fashion
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them on almost of all site.
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arranged
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well. If you
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a TV program late at night, you are able to recognize
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advertisements
about snacks and sweets. They broadcast them on purpose
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people
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IELTS essay Advertisement is really in success

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
109 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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