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Advertisement force people to buy. Is this true

Advertisement force people to buy. Is this true GYLw
Advertisement is a marketing strategy to sell a product, boost the selling rate, and convey the item to its buyers. Some people believe that marketing strategy compels us to buy unimportant products, while others believe that it is the best way to upgrade and know about the items that are helpful for living. I agree with the former opinion and believe that advertisement is a way of taking money out of people's pockets only. Firstly, it is sad to know that the medical product also gets advertised. What I mean by that medicines ought to be bought free of cost, be available at the public stores, and should be linked with the doctors' prescription only. Medicine companies are in the race of selling their products only and sometimes add material that helps in fast and temporary recovery, but it has long-term disadvantages. Injections, for instance, are banned in a few countries due to their side effects and sometimes cause sudden deaths. To save human life, the government needs to keep a bird's eye on them and discourage them by imposing strict fines. Secondly, with the advent of technology, technological gadgets indeed need to be updated and quite rightly advertised. However, few companies intentionally stop updating the software of the old product to compel the users to buy new items. Apple, for instance, stops updating the previous phone, as recently admitted that do this intentionally. Hence, advertising new products are fair but taking steps such as not updating the old items are an additional tool to compel user buy new products. In conclusion, the advertising companies help the owners to buy an item that the user does not need and compel them to buy. Advertisement of medical products, for instance, which has no long-term benefit such as curing the disease, but provide a temporary solution only is immoral.
Advertisement is a marketing strategy to sell a
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product
, boost the selling rate, and convey the
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item
to its buyers.
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Some
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people
believe that marketing strategy
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compels
us to
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buy
unimportant
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products
, while others believe that it is the best way to upgrade and know about the
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items
that are helpful for living. I
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agree
with the former opinion and believe that advertisement is a way of taking money out of
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people
's pockets
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only
.

Firstly
, it is sad to know that the medical
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product
also
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gets
advertised. What I mean by that medicines ought to be
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bought
free of cost, be available at the public stores, and should
be linked
with the doctors' prescription
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only
. Medicine
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companies
are in the race of selling their
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products
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only
and
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sometimes
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add
material that
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helps
in
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fast
and temporary recovery,
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but
it has long-term disadvantages. Injections,
for instance
,
are banned
in a few countries due to their side effects and
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sometimes
cause sudden deaths. To save human life, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to
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keep
a bird's eye on them and discourage them by imposing strict fines.

Secondly
, with the advent of technology, technological gadgets
indeed
need to
be updated
and quite
rightly
advertised.
However
, few
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companies
intentionally
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stop
updating the software of the
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old
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product
to
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compel
the users to
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buy
new
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items
. Apple,
for instance
,
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stops
updating the previous phone, as recently admitted that do this
intentionally
.
Hence
, advertising new
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products
are
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fair
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but
taking steps such as not updating the
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old
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items
are an additional tool to
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compel
user
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buy
new products.

In conclusion
, the advertising
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companies
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help
the owners to
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buy
an
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item
that the user does not need and
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compel
them to
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buy
.
The usual collocation for "Advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
Advertisement of
medical
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products
,
for instance
, which has no long-term benefit such as curing the disease,
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but
provide a temporary solution
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only
is immoral.
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IELTS essay Advertisement force people to buy. Is this true

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
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