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Advantages and disadvantages of making more tings in factories than made by hand

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For ages mankind has been building thousands of things and items. Firstly, they made some tools for hunting and dshes for using at home. The development of handcraftscoused the improement of trade jobs and selse. Furthermore the weapons they made effected the development of agroculture. However, every new job created thousands work pleases. It supplies them with food and money. The things made by hand were factorilised in the last two ages. It brought a number of effects to the mankind at first. Becouse of the changes lots of workers were out of work and had to change their lifestile, as a result planty of families were hungry. The events observed near past. Hand made things, surely, better than machinical things because making things by master are checked attentionally. So they are more believible. In our developed world handmade things are more appriciated than the items made by machenies. The good sides of maching things made in factories are the country may develop more than as usually. For instance, a kniting machine may do more than ten people without paying paymant for the workers the price of goods decrise much more, it effected the development of industryin the republic, surely it is more profitable not only for government but also for the population of the society. In short, industrialised society is more benificial for the country. With being factories the taxes are paid much more.
For ages mankind has been building thousands of things and items.
Firstly
, they made
some
tools for hunting and
dshes
for using at home. The development of
handcraftscoused
the
improement
of trade jobs and
selse
.
Furthermore
the weapons they made effected the development of
agroculture
.
However
, every new job created thousands work
pleases
. It supplies them with food and money.

The things made by hand were
factorilised
in the last two ages. It brought a number of effects to the mankind at
first
.
Becouse
of the
changes
lots of workers were out of work and had to
change
their
lifestile
,
as a result
planty
of families were hungry. The
events
observed near past. Hand made things,
surely
, better than
machinical
things
because
making things by master are
checked
attentionally
.
So
they are more
believible
. In our developed world handmade things are more
appriciated
than the items made by
machenies
.

The
good
sides of
maching
things made in factories are the country may develop more than as
usually
.
For instance
, a
kniting
machine may do more than ten
people
without paying
paymant
for the workers the price of
goods
decrise
much more, it effected the development of
industryin
the republic,
surely
it is more profitable not
only
for
government
but
also
for the population of the society.

In short,
industrialised
society is more
benificial
for the country. With being factories the taxes
are paid
much more.
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IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages of making more tings in factories than made by hand

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